A graduate student in counseling psychology
Source text:
These findings suggest that parental and family factors are related to the probability of successful treatment outcome. Following from that, it seems reasonable to hypothesize that addressing parental psychopathology and family functioning in treatment would lead to greater treatment response rates. Theorists have argued that because children are incredibly reliant on their family environment, an improved model of treatment would be one that is premised on an interpersonal conceptualization of youth anxiety and that aims to employ interventions at the social (e.g., familial) rather than individual levels (Barrett, 2000). Furthermore, including parents in the treatment of externalizing disorders in childhood (e.g., oppositional, aggressive, and antisocial behavior) has been documented as beneficial to treatment success (Kazdin, 1997; Patterson, Chamberlain, & Reid, 1982; Woolfenden, Williams, & Peat, 2002).
Source:
Barmish, A. J., & Kendall, P. C. (2005). Should parents be co-clients in cognitive-behavioral therapy for anxious youth? Journal of Clinical Child and Adolescent Psychology : The Official Journal for the Society of Clinical Child and Adolescent Psychology, American Psychological Association, Division 53,34(3), 569-581. doi:10.1207/s15374424jccp3403_12
Writer’s text:
Theorists have also contended that because children are very dependent on their parents and family environment, “an improved model of treatment would be one that is premised on an interpersonal conceptualization of youth anxiety and that aims to employ interventions at the social (e.g., familial) rather than individual levels” (Barmish and Kendall, 2005, p. 570). (not in the reference list)
Writer’s comment:
I wanted to highlight this part ‘an improved model of …’, I wanted people to pay attention to this quote as opposed to paying attention to everything, and I also wanted to emphasize that children depend on their parent and family environment. I wanted to emphasize the role of parents a bit more.
Citing indirect source in text should look like: Barrett (2000) contended that because…“an improved model of…” (as cited in Barmish and Kendall, 2005, p.570) and should be referenced in the reference list. Direct citing, of the highlighted text, should refer to the original author whenever possible to locate original material.
Through this citation, the writer comments on wanting to highlight the importance of family, dependency upon family, and role of family and family environment in youth anxiety treatment, rather than everything else. It’s difficult to know what they mean as “everything else.” The writer’s text and comment suggests that dependency on parents and family environment are key factors in anxiety treatment. Is it that the writer interprets child dependency upon parental roles and responsibilities to be the specific role in efficacy of the studies? Does the writer believe that child dependency upon family is the means to successful treatment of anxiety? This is quite a broad topic. They could be more specific in their text statement to narrow down their point.
For example, in the next paragraph Barmish and Kendall (2005), go on to discuss parental anxiety levels and behaviors as factors in their involvement in anxiety treatment that may lead to child independence rather than dependence upon parents. The authors then discuss Silverman & Kurtines’ (1999) idea of transference of control from the parent to the child and that this implementation of child-dependent self-control techniques can be difficult for parents with anxious symptoms and inability to let go of control, as described by Ginsburg et al. (1995).
These ideas could potentially influence the depth of the writer’s portrayal of their opinion regarding the importance of parents in social influence on anxiety interventions in youth. (A graduate in Education)