Voice Memo
Hi friend. So today I’d like to talk about my four year old daughter. Um, now she’s with me back in my hometown in China with the grandparents. Before she came back, well, we were home in Vancouver, and then she is always this little young, bright kid that is outgoing and carefree. Um, and is uh, a little bit bossy and always uh, doing things pretty much on her own terms. But we always consider her as kindhearted and generally listened to mommy and daddy. However, this trip has been a real immersion as I take her back to the Chinese culture for the first time, I both her and I have, um, experienced the culture shock. Our 1st landing was Hong Kong. She stayed with, um, my father in law for two days, and then she, uh, had lunch with my mother in law, and now she’s back home with my parents continue to stay here for 10 days.
We had a tense 2 days in Hong Kong. Um, 1st she was she’s so young and struggling with jet lag. Second, it’s the culture, the Eastern culture that is so different from the Western culture that, also with my father-in-law, his thinking and also his educational method has a very traditional outlook, and he always wanted my daughter to behave in a specific way. To behave like a so-called girl. You know, always uh, either when eating and also waving, uh, say hello, say goodbye. And then he also brags about that with his other granddaughter, how he hired somebody from the very prestigious kindergarten in Hong Kong, and then she’d be with her 247 until good etiquettes are formed. And suggests we do the same thing for my daughter. One moment that really stuck with me, uh, he told my daughter that tonight we are having dinner with his important friends. And he told my four year old that she could just stay for a while, but she had to dance to everybody before leaving. Of course, my daughter, with her cautious nature, and also at this age, right, where no is a default and she strayed to push back. And then also the more you push her, the more she’s going to resist. Of course, she fell asleep because of the jet lag, so this didn’t happen. But the expectation was already felt. However, with my parents she feels lots of love, warmth and affection, but I can still see that when she sees my parents friends that she needs this transition time, and then I don’t think the parents, they are giving kids quite the same leeway compared to the West.
And with my daughter, she’s also very naughty. She’s, she has that endless energy, and so, I’m just thinking, you know, I’m, I’m, to me, it’s very tiring. Uh, to caught in between the expectations and also to think from her point of view, um, That’s what I am trying to get at, and hopefully, I don’t think I’m going to have a solution, but I’m just going to try, because I’m just trying to be the best mother, because it’s the, what other people think of her, it’s not very important, but, Um, to me, it is the most important thing that she’s happy, and she’s kind, and she’s, she’s growing into a person that, uh, she is at this, um, suited for her personality. Lots of her behaviours are considered normal at this stage, the kids just need time. That’s why I’m constantly trying hard and keep battling on this. Mm, yeah, this is my memo for today.
- How does the text deviate from conventions of written English? The voice memo strongly favors a conversational style over a written one. It flows with the natural rhythm of thought, creating a sense of real-time reflection rather than a planned piece. Also, it lacks the formal organization of written English. Ideas move in a more personal way. My voice memo shows a lack of development of thoughts, order, and proper sentence structure. The logic is emotional and associative rather than linear and polished.
- What is “wrong” in the text? What is “right”? From a formal writing perspective, what’s “wrong” is that sentences are sometimes fragmented or run together, thoughts are repeated, and the pacing relies on my pauses. However, what’s “right” is its authenticity and emotional clarity. The raw, unedited delivery makes my feelings feel immediate and genuine. It shows vivid scenes that can make the cultural conflict more tangible.
- What are the most common “mistakes” in the text and why do you consider them “mistakes”? The most common elements that would be edited out of formal writing are the verbal fillers, repetition of points, casual mid-sentence adjustments, and vague connections. However, I believe these aren’t necessary mistakes in this context. In a voice memo, they aren’t errors; they are part of the medium that shows thinking in process. The text is unpolished and lacks literary enhancement, but that’s precisely what gives it its relatable, human quality.
- What if you had “scripted” the story? What difference might that have made? A scripted version would transform the delivery while keeping the heart of the story. The text would likely be more organized and intentional, and better reflecting on the meaning. Also, the vocabulary might become more precise. Overall, the emotional truth would remain, but the spontaneous quality would be replaced. A scripted version would be almost identical to the written version, but it would be a cleaner, more self-contained narrative.
- In what ways does oral storytelling differ from written storytelling? Walter Ong suggests that oral culture is situational and communal, while literate culture enables abstract, private reflection. The oral-style narrative is more aggregative, personal, participatory, and episodic. The voice memo builds details alongside each other, which feels like a conversation with friends, and moves through events as I remember them. The written version would be more analytical and structured, dense, and linear. It would be better at supporting the central themes, using more descriptive language, and following a clear narrative arc from beginning to end.