To: Aran Chang, ENGL 301 Student
From: Cathy Liu, ENGL 301 Student
Date: July 23, 2020
Subject: Peer Review of Aran’s Memo for Evan Crisp
Dear Aran,
Thank you for another well done assignment. Your effort was clearly evident in the work you put out. Here are just some minor suggestions that may help you improve your future memorandums.
First Impressions
You did a great job in making the memo concise and to the point – you give all the necessary information Evan Crisp needs. Remember to add “Memorandum” as a heading! Also, memorandums do not need a closing statement (Best regards).
Organization
There are no issues with organization in your memo. The titles are bold which make it easy to identify each section and your tips fall in an order that seems natural to the reader.
Writing Style
You maintain a friendly tone throughout the memo which is pleasant for the reader. You avoided starting the memo with “I” which shows how you follow the rules of the “YOU” attitude. You also do a good job at avoiding using the word “you” throughout the body.
One note to be careful about is to avoid using imperative verbs at the beginning of the bullet list. Dr. Paterson stated that this is the most common error for this assignment.
Spelling and Grammar
There are no spelling or grammatical errors that I can see – good job!
Concluding Comments
Overall, the effort you put into this assignment is clearly demonstrated by how little mistakes there are. Here is a summary of my suggestions:
- Remember to include “Memorandum” as a heading for the assignment
- Memorandum do not need closing statements
- Avoid using imperative verbs as the starting word in the bullet list
Link to Aran’s memo: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-98a-2020sa/2020/07/19/assignment-3-1-writing-withyou-attitude-aran/
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