ENGL 301 Peer Review
Peer Reviewer: Sydney Dunn
Author: Meera Patel
Date: July 23rd 2020
Document being reviewed: Memorandum: Writing Effective Email Requests
Thank you for submitting your memorandum assignment. You have created a very impressive list of suggestions for Evan Crisp to employ. Below are some suggestions for how you may continue to improve this assignment.
Writing Style
The memo remains quite clear and concise while appropriate emphasizing what each action can accomplish for the reader as outlined by the you-attitude approach. Elaborating on some of the suggestions and including a more personal introduction would help make the memo more personal and contribute to the you-attitude.
Grammar
An appropriate verb tense has been selected and imperative verbs have successfully been avoided. The suggestion that begins with “Emphasizing…” could be reworked to create a smoother sentence. This could be as simple as changing it to “emphasizing positive facts such as…” The word “to” in the following point could be changed to “will.”
Organization
The order of the suggestions could be reconfigured to emphasize certain points for the student. The points you have included that begin with “Expressing appreciation…” and “focusing on structure…” could appear higher on the list.
Level of Detail
Adding additional details and including reasonings behind each of the suggestions may help the reader understand the benefit of each for their situation.
I hope that you find these suggestions helpful. Please do not hesitate to reach out if you have any questions regarding anything included above.
Original Assignment: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-98a-2020sa/2020/07/20/memorandum-writing-effective-email-requests/
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