DETAILS please
Without details:
My research proposal contains the following:
- Introduction of Topic
- Statement of Problem
- Proposed Solutions
- Scope of Questions
- Forms of Primary and Secondary Sources
- My Qualifications
- Conclusion
With Details:
My research proposal contains the following:
- Introduction of Topic – Improving recycling at Mobify
- Statement of Problem – Negative effects due to improper recycling
- Proposed Solutions – Educate, labeling, technology
- Scope of Questions – Areas to focus my research: customer approval, methods, costs and implicating new systems
- Forms of Primary and Secondary Sources – Surveys, observation and interviews as well as academic articles
- My Qualifications – Fresh point of view of the company and passion for the environment
- Conclusion – Wrap up
The reader of a Peer Review is not necessarily the writer of the document under review – so details are necessary. Please note in the following examples how pronouns have been edited-out as well as details included in red.
Example: “I have reviewed your research proposal. Thank you for your effort on producing such a well written proposal. It was very concise, organized and easy to read. I have provided my thoughts and suggestions below:
REWRITE: The proposal, “Paper Waste Reduction in Elite Educational Institute” is well written, concise, organized and easy to read. Please see suggestions below:
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Example: You have demonstrated how serious the issue is and why actions needed to be taken. I really enjoy reading it.
REWRITE: The proposal demonstrates the negative environmental and financial aspects of paper waste and promotes a zero-waste environment for the Yeouido Branch of Elite
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Example: “The introduction is short and concise and provides readers enough details to understand the background information of the issue.
REWRITE: The Introduction is concise providing details of the school’s success and rapid growth.
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