Assignment 3:1 Peer Review of Writing with Attitude

MEMORANDUM

To: Richard Chen, writing team member of Team Undefined
From: Elton Kok, writing team member of Team Undefined
Date: November 23, 2020
Subject: Review of Memorandum to Evan Crisp

Thank you for completing this memorandum to Evan Crisp. This memorandum is certainly insightful and should help Evan Crisp in writing better emails in the future. Written below is a review of this memorandum.

First Impressions

This memorandum is short, yet effective at communicating to the reader tips to improve their email writing. The memorandum does a great job at avoiding the use of imperative verbs at the beginning of the bullet list. The suggestions are all effective methods that Evan Crisp could implement to improve his email writing.

List of Tips

These tips are great suggestions for Evan Crisp to improve his email. It avoids using imperative verbs which is excellent as it avoids talking down to the reader and is great use of “YOU attitude” style of writing.

Writing Style

The style of writing conforms somewhat well to “YOU attitude” style of writing. However, there seems to be too much use of the word “you” in this memorandum. Using the word “you” can make the reader feel singled out, especially when it is criticizing the reader. Limiting the use of “you” can help improve this memorandum and have it conform to the “YOU attitude” style of writing.

Grammar

This memorandum has no issues with grammar, however there does contain a minor spelling mistake.

• The title “Memorandom” should be spelled as “Memorandum”

Concluding Remarks

This memorandum has great suggestions to Evan Crisp to improve his email writing and follows the “YOU attitude” writing style somewhat by avoiding the use of imperative verbs. The following suggestions should help improve this memorandum.

• Fixing the spelling error in the “Memorandum” title
• Limiting the use of the word “you” to conform to “YOU attitude” writing style

I hope these suggestions are helpful and if there are anymore questions, feel free to contact me at my email kokelton@student.ubc.ca.

Link to original memorandum: Memorandum to Evan Crisp – Richard Chen