Peer Review for Annie Maurer’s ” Writing Effective E-mail Messages to Professors”

To:  Annie Maurer, ENGL 300 99A Student

From: Shujun Peng, ENGL 300 99A Student

Date: November 23, 2020

Subject:  Advice on Writing Effective E-mail Messages to Professors Peer Review

Thank you for submitting the “You Attitude” assignment. The memo has some really good advice. Please see a list of suggested edits :

First Impressions:

The memo to Evan crisp is well written, and it is very concise and well organized, the tone is very professional, and avoided using “you” in the memo.

Organization

• The organization of the memo is well organized into three parts, introduction, body (tips for writing a business e-mail), and conclusion sections.
• Bullet points and subtitles make it easy to follow with main points listed
• Spacing is consistent

Content:

• The second subtitle is a bit off-topic, as this memo is for Evan Crisp, a university student; change the second subtitle “ tips for writing business e-mail” to “ tips for writing school e-mail”
• The tips offered in the body section could be expanded further; for example, what about “ how to address the professor in the email?” and “ Should Evan Crisp delete the P.S sentence?”.  Consider all the inappropriate things in her email, and expand the list of suggestions.
• Taking out  the “ people” (see instructor’s blog):

• Rewrite “ the professor will have an easier time finding a solution” to “ considering readers’ point of view, and how to assist the readers to find a solution”

Grammar:

– Rewrite “ Avoiding slang and abbreviations ensures the professor” to “ Avoiding slangs and abbreviations to ensure the professor…”

Concluding comments:

Thank you for submitting the memo to Evan Crisp. If you have any questions, please feel free to contact me through my email at shujunpengschool@gmail.com

Best,

Shujun.