Peer Review of Mitchell Prost’s memo to Evan Crisp

Memorandum

To: Mitchell Prost, ENGL 301 Student
From: Rodrigo Samayoa, ENGL 301 studentNovember 23, 2020

Re: Peer review of memo to Evan Crisp.

Dear Mitchell,

Good job with the feedback you gave Evan Crisp. It is very clear, consider and to the point. Most importantly, it is written with you-attitude and avoids the use of pronouns and imperative verbs in the body of the sentence. Below is some feedback on your review of Evan Crisp’s memo.

Introduction

The introduction is very clear in what the purpose of the memo is and goes straight to the point.

Main body

• The body of the memo does a good job at avoiding the use of pronouns and imperative verbs.
  Separating out the main points of the body of the memo into bullet points can help emphasize the different points made.

Grammar

• Good job on proofreading the memo. There are no grammar or spelling mistakes that stand out.

Style

• Rewording the first sentence in the introduction may help to make it more concise and understandable
  Original: “In this memo, see a list of ways to improve emails written to professors regarding being added into courses.”
  Alternative: “This memo lists some ways to improve the email to your professor.”
• Removing the first “your” in the second sentence of the introduction can make the sentence sound less repetitive.
  Original: “Your original email to your professor is shown below with a suggested re-write for your consideration.”
  Alternative: “The original email to your professor is shown below with a suggested rewrite for your consideration.”

I hope these suggestions are useful to you. Please don’t hesitate to get in touch if you have any questions about the feedback.

Original memo