MEMORANDUM
To: Syed Ahmed, writing team member of Team Undefined
From: Aleem Tariq, writing team member of Team Undefined
Date: November 23, 2020
Subject: Review of Memorandum to Evan Crisp
Your memorandum is both insightful and provides more than enough detail needed for Evan to shape his current and potential future email correspondence. Written below is a review.
First Impressions
The memorandum was effective in communicating the essence of the “YOU attitude” and provides effective detail to justify the ‘why’ behind the “YOU attitude” writing style. The suggestions provided should sufficiently motivate Ethan to change his writing style, as they are offered in a friendly manner.
Writing Style
The recommendations offered conform very well with the “YOU attitude” of writing, both in terms of what is recommended, and how the author writes. Using the word “you”, coupled with imperatives, makes the tone commanding; The author has managed to walk the line between offering advice and criticism, hence the tone appears both friendly and convincing.
However, the “Understand human nature” heading is unnecessary, as the advice listed there seems to be a rehashing of what is suggested before. I would instead, suggest that the first two sentences only be kept and included at the end, as this section ties together exactly why the “YOU attitude” of writing is ideal for email correspondence.
Grammar
No grammatical issues were noted in the writing.
Conclusion
Overall, the memorandum offers excellent suggestions, both highlighting and embodying the “YOU attitude” writing style. In addition, the memorandum effectively sympathizes with Evan’s position, making it more likely that Mr. Crisp will, moving forward, adopt such a writing style.
Link to Syed’s memorandum: Memorandum to Evan Crisp – Syed Ahmed
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