Peer Review of Amina’s Writing with “You Attitude” Assignment

To: Amina Fatima
From: Mitchell Prost
Date: November 23, 2020
Subject: Peer Review of Writing with “You Attitude” Assignment

Hi Amina,

You have provided some great advice to Evan. My first impressions of your memo were positive. Comments and suggestions for improvements of the memo are included below.

Writing Style

The suggestions are well written and communicate the advice in a professional, approachable, and clear tone. One suggestion is the use of verbs ending in “ing” rather than using the imperative. The suggestions provided make use of the imperative, such as “Use a professional email address” and “Make your request clear.” Potential replacements are provided below:

“Use a professional email address” could be rewritten as “Utilizing a professional email address.”

“Make your request clear” could be rewritten as “Making clear requests.”

The same pattern can be applied to the other lines.

Grammar

I have no feedback to give as the grammar seemed to be perfect.

Overall, the tone of the memo was professional and offered an additional aspect of support through the empathy provided by the sharing of personal experience. Great job, Amina!

Amina’s original memo