To: Amol Chahal, Author
From: Anusha Saleem, Reviewer
Date: October 22, 2020
Subject: Formal Report Proposal Review
First Impressions:
Thank you for this proposal for Digitizing Flu-Shot Appointment Bookings. It is clear, concise and very well-written. Please see the review of the document below, along with suggestions for improvement for your reference.
Organization:
- The proposal is well-organized with clear headings and succinct paragraphs to go with them
- The introduction and the problem statement are well-worded and identify the singular subject of this proposal instantly.
- The document will benefit more if there is a heading mentioning the subject of the formal report proposal.
Introduction:
The introduction lays out the current situation clearly and is well-described.
Statement of Problem:
The expressions and the tone used to describe the problem give a sense of urgency and showcase the need for a solution to a very valid and ongoing issue.
Proposed Solution:
The proposed solution seems feasible and looks easy to implement. It is an innovative idea and, it would be interesting to see further details on how the cost-benefit analysis will fare in regards to making and deploying an application versus physical documentation and paperwork.
Scope:
The scope section highlights extensive and thought-provoking questions, allowing the gathering of information from both pharmacy owners and patients alike. Please also consider how the use of surveys will be beneficial in amassing information and data points for the study.
Concluding Comments:
In conclusion, please see the following list of suggested edits for your final draft:
- Inclusion of a heading highlighting the subject of the proposal
- Inclusion of cost-benefit analysis data in either the proposed solution section or scope of interview questions.
- Inclusion of surveys as a data-gathering method along with interviews.
This report proposal is an intriguing read to solve a real, ongoing issue, and was overall very informative and organized. It has the promise to be an excellent report that I look forward to reading.
Thank you, and please feel free to ask any questions you may have. It was a pleasure reviewing this proposal.
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