Assignment 3:3 Peer Review of Formal Report Draft

To: Junrong Zhu, ENGL 301 student

From: Erin Mungham, ENGL 301 student

Date: December 10 2020

Subject: Peer review of formal report draft

Thank you for submitting the formal report draft on Improving Study Experiences for International BCS Student’s in a Distant Time Zone. Please see the peer review of this formal report draft below which outlines suggestions for improvements and areas of excellence.

First Impressions

This formal report on Improving Study Experiences for International BCS Students in a Distant Time Zone includes an informative introduction, organized headings throughout and a detailed conclusion. This report clearly identifies and analyzes a problem and provides great recommendations for solutions.

Content

• The recommendations list in the introduction keeps the reader engaged and interested in the upcoming pages
• Using bullet points to organize the recommendations is a clear way to get the message across to the reader
• The introduction is clear and concise and outlines the topics of the paper very well
• Summarizing the findings in the conclusion is an excellent strategy to relate back to the proposed problem in the instruction

Organization

• The three subheadings in the Data Summary are informative and directly relate to the problem mentioned in the introduction
• Bolding subheadings allow the paper to look more interesting and helps to visually separate topics
• Big chunks of text are avoided throughout this paper which ensures good flow

Style

• Avoiding the use of a negative tone can be achieved by finding a replacement word for “discouraging” in the first sentence of the Abstract

Design

• Placing figure captions directly below figures will help readers understand the association between the two
• Using smaller spaces between paragraphs will create a clean and consistent layout

Concluding Comments:

This formal report draft has plenty of great information to support the problem that is stated in the introduction. With the following edits, this is will be an excellent formal report.

• Bolding subheadings allow the paper to look more interesting and helps to visually separate topics
• Avoiding the use of a negative tone can be achieved by finding a replacement word for “discouraging” in the first sentence of the Abstract
• Placing figure captions directly below figures will help readers understand the association between the two
• Using smaller spaces between paragraphs will create a clean and consistent layout

Thank you and please feel free to ask any questions, it has been a pleasure peer reviewing this work.

Junrong’s Formal Report Draft