To: Carol Li
From: Han Li
Peer Review/Term: Solar Photovoltaic panel
Thanks for posting the definition assignment; it looks great. Please see the review of the document below with some improvable suggestions.
First Impressions:
This document leaves a good first impression. It is well-formed and labeled, and the visuals are very eye-catching.
Organization:
- An informative introduction to Photovoltaic technology.
- Bolded subtitles and proper spacing make it easy to read.
- Great in-text citation- please take care of visuals as well.
- A conclusion paragraph summarizing the previous information will leave a deeper impression on the reader.
Expression:
- In general, this tone is professional without pronouns, and it is clear.
- All three definitions are helpful for the audience without background knowledge to understand “solar photovoltaic panel’.
- Some expressions can be more concise, avoiding two verbs in a row. For example, “The solar photovoltaic panel has gained ground in Canada in recent years.”.
Content:
The document fulfills the majority of the requirements. There are four adjusted suggestion
- An introduction of the criteria and the objective of this assignment
- Describe the reading situation
- Combine the fourth reason for installing residential PV panels with the third one, as they are connected.
- Maybe talk about the environmental factor of “Why install residential PV panels?”
Visuals:
- The assignment makes full use of visuals.
- The first visual needs more explanation for some professional terms.
- Maybe three visuals are a bit too much.
Works Cited List：
- Perfect works cited list with three outside references.
Grammar and Typos:
- There are several minor punctuation errors like missing commas before “and”.
- For example, “The term “photovoltaic” is derived from the words “photo” from Greek, which means light and “voltaic” stands for voltage, a parameter of electrical current.”
- Some sentences seem to be in the wrong tense like “could”.
- For example, “Solar panels convert solar energy into electrical direct current and inverters convert it into alternating current, so that the energy from the sun could be used to energize appliances, such as lights, fridges, and freezers.”
Concluding Comments:
This assignment is an enjoyable read, which is well organized, clear, and informative. With these small errors corrected, it will be a more complete and helpful document:
- Introducing the assignment objectives
- Describing the reading situation
- Including a conclusion will be great
- Considering the suggestions for visuals
- Self-editing for small typos
Thanks again for your great work and it’s grateful to work with you in a team. If there are any questions, please feel free to ask.
Han Li.
https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99c-2021wc/2022/01/30/87749/
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