Peer Review of Definitions – microaggression

To Anna Li, ENGL 301 Student

From: Lucy Li, ENGL 301 Student

Date: February 4^th, 2022

Peer Review: Review of Term – Microaggression

 

Thank you for submitting your definition assignment. Please see my comments on the document below; I thoroughly enjoyed reading your work on defining the term and have provided some suggestions for improvement that I think will be useful.

 

First Impressions:

The document is well-written and organized. It is very well-organized and labelled. The document is easy to follow and read, thanks to the use of sentences, paragraphs, and point form.

Organization:

• The introduction is well-written, and it explains the assignment but also includes the goals.
• The information is well-organized and labelled. The use of bold in the subheading aids the reader’s understanding.
• It is important to keep the labels consistent; it is easy to overlook labels like “parenthetical definition” and miss to capitalize the first letter as the rest of the labels do.
• The document flows well, but a brief conclusion will aid the reader in connecting back to the original definition and making connections.

Expression:

• Your tone is professional, and your expression is clear, concise, and to the point

Content:

• The document is complete and meets most of the requirements of the assignment; it includes
  • A thorough introduction
  • There are three types of definitions.
  • There are four different types of expansion.
  • The use of a visual
  • A list of works cited
• Rewrite the parenthetical definition using a complete sentence. Please refer to the examples shown in the textbook chapter 17.3.1.
• Since the Label for the visual was “Figure 1”, it would be better to refer to the visual by writing “In Figure 1, …” rather than “In the picture…”.

 Visuals:

•  The visual was well used to help define the term.
  • Some of the words in the visual are small, so it would be better if the visual was a little larger and more legible.
  • Please revise textbook on the correct labeling of the figure.

 Works Cited List:

• The works cited list is impressive, but there are a few errors that need to be corrected.
  • The list of citations is not arranged alphabetically.
  • The fourth citation is mostly correct, but one more author is not mentioned.

Grammar and Typos:

• The document is well-written, but some sections require more attention.
  • The last sentence of the first paragraph under Figure 1 is extremely long, making it difficult to read for some readers. It would be easier to follow the list than read the long sentence if it were written in point form.
• Some capitalizations have been overlooked or misused.
  • The “it is usually invisible…” in the second sentence of the first paragraph after the visual is missing the capitalization for the “i.”
  • The term “microaggression” was written as “Microaggression” in the second paragraph, which is inconsistent with the use of the term uncapitalized “microaggression” throughout the document.

 Concluding Comments:

Your definition is engaging to read, as well as informative and well-organized. This document will be beneficial and great after the following edits, and a thorough proofread for minor errors:

• Keep labels consistent
• Providing a reading situation
• Add a brief conclusion.
• Double-check the Works Cited list to ensure it contains all the necessary elements.

 

Thank you for taking the time to read this review, and please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any questions about the review I provided. It has been a pleasure to look over this work.

 

Bests,

Lucy Li

Enclosure:  Microaggression Definition