To: Lucy Li
From: Anna Li
Peer Review / Term: The Back of House
Thank you for submitting the definition assignment, it is such a well-written document, good job! Please see the following documents with suggestions for improvements.
First Impressions:
This is an impressive document that satisfied the assignment requirement with a clear visual presentation and a well-formatted reference list.
Organization:
- The introduction is short but clear with the assignment description.
- Bold and italic headings are well-used to improve users’ reading experience.
- Figure and in-text citation are correctly presented.
- The parts of the back of house are repetitively mentioned throughout the document, make sure writing is concise.
- This document has no conclusion, it ends abruptly, be sure to have a conclusion to make the document more structured.
Expression:
- Overall, the expression is professional and clear.
- Some sentences need further explanation, such as:
- “The back-of-house does not involve front-of-house operations, nor does it involve customer service”
- The problem is for readers who do not know hospitality, the front-of-house operation is unknown, more examples on front-of-house operations would be better for reading to understand the difference between front-of-house and back-of-house.
Content:
- The document satisfied all assignment requirements, which includes
- Description of the assignment
- The situation indicates the potential audience
- parenthetical definition and sentence definition
- Only utilize three types of expansion definition which are negation, visual, analysis of parts, one more expansion definition required.
- One visual
- A reference list in MLA style
Visuals:
- The visual is correctly labeled and cited.
Works Cited List:
- The work cited list is mostly correct, one minor error on citing a figure from a website, make sure the website name is in front of the publication date.
- Make sure spacing is correct for the last citation.
Grammar and Typos:
- There are several minor punctuation errors when using and:
- When a sentence contains three or more words, phrases, or clauses, consider inserting a comma in front of the last and separating the elements in the sentence.
Concluding Comments:
The definition is easy to read and not hard to follow for hospitality amateurs, well done! Here are some edit suggestions for consideration:
- Including one more type of expansion definition, it can be one of history, operating principle, examples, comparison, and contrast, required condition.
- Including a conclusion at the end.
- Self-edit punctuation.
- Double-checking Works Cited list.
Hope the review helps, and thank you for reading it through! please feel free to contact me if you have any questions!
link to the definition:https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99c-2021wc/2022/01/31/three-definitions/
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