Peer Review / Formal Report Proposal: Improving the Quality and Accessibility of Financial Literacy Resources Available to UBC Students
Thank you for submitting a research proposal outlining your concern for the lack of financial literacy resources for the UBC students. The proposal clearly outlines the problem, research methods, and a solution devised. Please see below where I outlined the areas of improvement needed for the proposal.
First Impression:
The proposal clearly states the problem, has all the assignment requirements and provides an avenue the author will take to tackle to find the solution.
Organization:
- The report recommends an inefficiency that could be targeted within the UBC community in a well-formatted format.
- The proposal is structured with an introduction, the statement of the problem, solution, scope, methods, qualifications, and conclusion, which are all included in the task requirements.
- The report is well-formatted, and the problem, method, and potential solution could be easily read with a good flow.
Content:
- The proposal captures the topic to be researched and is equipped with the right question to be asked.
- The topic can be written without the problem of confidentiality and can be also efficiently illustrated with graphs if needed.
- Overall, it is headed to a great start!
Clarity:
- There is a minor grammatical error:
- For example, “Though more cynical observers may feel that the University has little incentive to provide extensive financial literacy education, or that it is not the responsibility of the University to do so. I disagree with these conclusions.” The first and second sentences should be connected.
- Kindly make minor grammatical adjustments. Overall, the paper is truly well-written.
Highlights/Weaknesses:
- Questions asked in scope address problems mentioned in the objective and will fill the gap of knowledge needed to devise a solution.
- The methods include both primary and secondary data required to complete the research task. The proposal is headed towards a fruitful solution, which could lead to financial literacy improving on campus.
- The report outlines a very large issue of lack of resources for financial literacy for UBC students. There is a potential problem of the issue being a large problem that a solution cannot be devised within the target length of 12-15 pages double spaced. However, if there is a simple solution or first steps that the university could take, the potential weakness could become a strength of the research.
- The author of the proposal stated he has a great passion for finance and has finance-related experience. While performing the primary research, the author could resort to personally criticizing the individual or group that he is researching on. If there are instruments placed to explore the research objectively, the topic could be scrutinized efficiently.
Audience:
- The proposal is directed to UBC Student Services and the AMS Advocacy committee, who have actionable power to lead change.
Concluding Comments:
Thank you for the research proposal. This research proposal poses a question to a problematic topic and is headed to provide a great solution for the university. Your expertise in finance and degree of knowledge shows that you are well-qualified to provide an actionable solution. To better the proposal, there is only a handful of recommendations:
- Revisions of minor grammatical errors.
- The topic seems to be a grand issue. For the primary research of the topic, it seems imperative that the researcher should well-plan the timeline of research to be conducted to be handed in before the deadline.
Please do not hesitate to ask any questions.
Best,
Kelly Kim
Improving the Quality and Accessibility of Financial Literacy Resources Available to UBC Students
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