To: Katherine Chan
From: Jennifer Worsham
Date: February 18, 2022
Subject: Peer Review of Proposal for Enhancing Resident Engagement in Marine Drive
I enjoyed reading your proposal to enhance resident engagement in Marine Drive. Your work is thought-provoking, illuminating an issue I had not considered. I have provided my feedback below.
First impressions:
Your qualifications give you a thorough understanding of the issues faced by residents, and your proposal is well-thought-out.
Overall document layout and design:
This proposal has been well-laid out and is written in a way that is easy to follow and understand.
Grammar and Typos:
The quality of the writing is high, with no typographical or grammatical errors except the word “strength” in the Conclusion, which should read “strengthen”.
Introduction:
Generally thorough, but does not bring in the idea of the issues at stake.
I would recommend adding a line regarding the fact that there are significantly varying types of demographics that occupy the residence.
Statement of Problem:
You have detailed well the situation regarding the various cohorts of students and how the pandemic has affected the typical experience.
In this section, it might be helpful to add more about the specific issues that arise from the varied types of students living in the residence.
Proposed Solution:
The proposed solution is somewhat brief and might benefit from an example or two to point the reader toward your line of thinking.
Scope:
The scope seems well thought out, with questions that will help you to gain the information needed to attain your goal.
Methods:
Your proposed methods seem well-planned, with specific individuals and groups targeted for your research.
Qualifications:
Your qualifications show you to be someone who is well-placed to perform and analyze this research and develop a plan to meet your proposed solution. Your long experience in the UBC residences gives you insight that someone outside the community would not have.
Conclusion:
Your conclusion is concise and reiterates the problem and your plan to address it.
I appreciated the opportunity to review your engaging and informative work. I hope my feedback is useful.
Memo 2.1 – Proposal for Enhancing Resident Engagement in Marine Drive
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