To: Hansol Yang, Technical Writing Member
From: Eric Zhang, Technical Writing Member
Date: Feb 18, 2022
Peer Review – Formal Report Proposal
Great job on completing this assignment and posting it before the deadline. Please see below for my review and suggestions.
First impressions:
This is a very well-organized document with an interesting topic. Topic is very relatable to many UBC students, and it grabbed my attention immediately. It includes a proper format, which makes the document easy to follow.
Organization:
- Good introduction paragraph, it clearly stated the background information of your research topic
- Headings are bolded, which gives a clear structure of the document.
Content:
- All the topics from the textbook are covered and explained. These include:
- Proposed solution
- Scope
- Methods
- Qualifications
- Conclusion
Statement of Problem:
- Stated problem needs details, providing specifics on the issue:
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- For example, “Students have variety of opinions on the delivery of lectures, but the needs are not well-understood by the university”. What are some of these needs?
Grammar/Typos:
- Document contains some errors with grammar and sentence structure. For example, “Therefore, I am one of the students that I am willing to take opinions”.
- Note that “I am” is redundant in this sentence and that pronouns are recommended to be avoided.
Concluding Comments:
This proposal topic is very interesting to its potential audiences. It is also well written and organized, and it gives the audience a clear structure to follow. This can be a very successful proposal with the following suggestions and a good proofread:
- Expanding some of the problems that are stated
- Thorough proofread for sentence structure and grammatical errors.
Overall, very well written and hopefully you find my suggestions helpful to you. It was a treat reading your proposal and understanding your stand on the current in-person lectures. Please feel free to ask any question you may have.
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