To: Hansol Yang, ENGL 301 Student Writer
From: Eric Zhang, ENGL 301 Student Reviewer
Date: March 19, 2022
Subject: Peer Review of Formal Report Proposal: Improving UBC Students’ Experience in Hybrid Courses
Thank you for completing this report on improving UBC Students’ learning experience. It is obvious that you have done in-depth research on your topic, and it is overall enjoyable to read. Below are some suggestions to improve this report.
First impressions:
This is a very well-organized formal report with an interesting topic. The introduction and background about Hybrid course are thorough, making sure your audience understand what they are.
Organization:
The draft can be improved by differentiating the headings and subheadings with numbers and letters.
- For example, using “1)” for “Introduction” and use “A)” for “Definition of hybrid courses”.
Some headings are not correctly paginated.
- For example, “Introduction” should also be paginated on page 1, as it contains a paragraph.
Title Page and Table of Contents:
- The title page is well organized with a title of your report, name of your audience and the author.
- The table of content consists of all the topic covered in your report
Introduction:
The introduction explained the background of your topic in hybrid courses, the purpose of your report, the sources of your data and the scope of inquiry. One suggestion is to insert a section clearing stating what you are trying to achieve.
- You have stated that the purpose of this report is to recognize the opinions of students and professors, but what is expected to achieve with that information?
Data Analysis:
Each section provided appropriate topic that was being covered along with their corresponding visual.
- Missing source stating that “US students show more preference for online learning”
- Data should be properly analyzed, with the explanation of each variable/classification. Avoid assuming readers know how to interpret a graph or dataset.
- Research was conducted and sources were cited
Conclusion:
- Encourage to use letters for subheadings to differentiate between headings and subheadings.
- Includes the core topics that needs to be covered.
- Formatting under “Recommendations on hybrid course” needs to be revised.
- The hyphenated points confuse the reader as to what you are trying to explain
Style:
- The tone remains positive and consistence throughout the report, while addressing the issue.
Grammar and Sentence structure:
Report contains some grammar and sentence structure errors.
- Avoid using phrases such as “these days”, as it sounds casual and unprofessional. For example, in “Most courses use online platforms these days”, “these days” is unnecessary.
- Replace “To find out students’ needs and wants”, with “With the purpose to determine what the students desire”.
- Rephrase run-on sentences with transition words. Revisit second sentence under “ii) Expectations on future hybrid courses”.
Concluding Comments:
Overall, the flow of the report is fluent, and the content is sufficient to support your statement. The report is well-organized and easy to follow. This can be a very successful document with the following suggestions and a good proofread:
- Correctly paginate pages
- Differentiate headings and subheadings
- Include the missing sources in the body of your report
- Revisit the run-on sentences and rephrase them to maintain the flow of the report.
- Proofread and be attentive to grammar errors.
Hopefully you find my suggestions helpful to you. It was a treat reading your report and learn about the current state of hybrid education. Please feel free to ask any questions you may have. Thank you!
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