To: Kenny Colosie, UBC Student
From: MinZhang Si, Fellow UBC Student
Date: March 26, 2022
Subject: Review of Formal Report Draft for Paper Reduction System
I have enjoyed reading your formal report draft for a paper reduction system at West Coast Property Management. Please see the document below with suggestions for improvements.
First Impressions:
This is a draft with many components of the formal report. It demonstrates critical thinking and time spent on research on paper reduction and recycling in Canada tailored for West coast Property Management Ltd.
Table of Contents:
- It is alphanumeric as required.
- Adding the details to each Appendix would be necessary.
Letter of Transmission:
- The format is well followed.
- There is an extra “,” in your date.
- The font needs uniformity.
Abstract:
- It is clear and summarizes the report nicely.
- The recommendations are best written in non-imperative forms, like “using” and “implementing.”
Introduction:
- This section clearly introduces the topic on paper waste and is filled with data and statistics.
- It may be useful to review the instructor’s blog post “First Drafts of Formal Reports: Common Errors to Avoid” at this link here: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99c-2021wc/2022/03/11/88925/.
- The post mentions the need for present tense instead of past tense for the draft.
Data Section:
- This section also needs past tense.
- Some visuals for the section will be helpful.
- Time News Roman may be needed various parts in this section, including Part C.
Works Cited:
- For the final draft, MLA is recommended.
Concluding Comments:
The research on paper waste is a crucial topic. Completing the final sections, especially the conclusion where you detail the recommendations, will significantly improve your draft.
Thank you for the formal report draft and please let me know if you have any questions. All the best with your assignments.
Link to Kenny’s Formal Report Draft:
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