To: Jeemin Kim
From: Samantha Krieg
Date: 2022/06/10
Peer Review/ Term: Object-oriented Programming
I have reviewed the first draft of your definitions of object-oriented programing. Please review the following suggestions to help you improve future iterations of this document.
First Impressions:
- The purpose of the document was communicated effectively, and the concept introduced was understood immediately.
- There was adequate information given for the definition, however, more background information about its history and operating principle would be interesting.
- The parenthetical, sentence and expanded definitions provide enough context and information for non-technical readers with no background on the subject to have a high-level overview.
- After reading the definitions the first time I had the following questions in mind:
- Is this type of programming commonly used?
- If so, what are some applications?
- If not, why?
- How was this programming style developed?
- How do the objects communicate with each other?
- Is this type of programming commonly used?
Organization:
- The organization of the content was excellent, and the forecasting statements contributed to the clarity of the definitions.
- The definitions were well structured, and each section performed its intended task.
- The figures and subheadings were formatted well.
Introduction:
- The introduction clearly stated the purpose of the document.
- Consider elaborating on the intended audience and reading situation.
Parenthetical Definition:
- The parenthetical definition fits well within the sentence.
- The source cited is not appropriate and is missing a date, see the Works Cited section for more information.
Sentence Definition:
- The concept is well explained; however, there is more than one sentence, and it could be edited to be more concise.
- See the Grammar and Spelling subsection for more information.
- The source cited is missing a date, see the Works Cited section for more information.
Expanded Definition:
- The various methods of expression used in this section (comparison and contrast, required conditions, example and visual) strengthened the definition.
- The expanded definition begins abruptly with the comparison, consider adding a history or etymology section to provide more background information.
- Some technical terms should be edited or removed.
- See the Grammar and Spelling subsection for more information.
- The comparison section of the expanded definition is the most effective part.
- It helped me better understand how this programming technique is used and its importance.
Visuals:
- The visual effectively supports the information given in the expanded definition.
Grammar and Spelling:
- No spelling mistakes are made.
- Jargon and technical terms are used in the comparison and example of the expanded definition, including:
- Reusable or mutable code
- Self-sustainable programming paradigm
- Instance
- Property vales
- Consider re-writing the sentence definition to make it more concise and only one sentence.
Works Cited:
- Wikipedia is not an appropriate source for academic work.
- Please ensure that all in-text citations have dates.
- If there is no date available, use n.d.
Concluding Comments:
Overall, I thought that all three of your definition styles were clear and accessible. I had a positive initial impression of the definitions, and I am impressed with your hard work. If I were your supervisor or your editor, I would ask for small revisions to the document before approval, including:
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- Consider elaborating on the intended audience and objective in the introduction.
- Consider re-writing the sentence definition to make it more concise and only one sentence.
- The expanded definition begins abruptly with the comparison, consider adding a history or etymology section to provide more background information.
- In my opinion, this is the most in need of improvement.
- Remove the technical terms from the comparison and example in the expanded definition or add parenthetical definitions to explain them.
- Wikipedia is not an appropriate source for academic work.
- Please ensure that all in-text citations have dates.
Thank you and please do not hesitate if you have any questions.
https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl30198a2022s12/2022/06/08/301-definitions-jeemin-kim/
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