David’s Peer Review of Nicole’s Definition

To Nicole White

From: David Cheung

Date: June 10^th, 2022

Peer Review Term: Fuel Cells

Thank you for submitting your definition for Fuel Cells. It was an interesting read. Please see the review of your document and suggestions for improvement below.

First Impressions:

This document appears to be a comprehensive definition of the term “fuel cells”. The four methods of expansion are laid out well, but the document is wordy in places and there are some minor grammatical errors spread throughout the document. Please see below.

Organization:

• A good introductory paragraph introducing the context and audience of the document.
• It is well organized with bolded and underlined headings.

Expression:

• Overall, the tone of the document is professional and wording of the document is clear. However, there are places where the document is wordy or confusing.
  • The phrase “combined in a stack” is wordy and can be shortened to stacked together.
  • “A fuel cell is a device that operates like a battery to conduct electricity.”
    • A reader might not know how this process works.

Content:

• The document is complete according to assignment requirements:
  • An introduction
  • Three forms of definition
  • Four types of expansion including a visual
  • A works cited list

Visuals:

The visual does a good job of showing how a fuel cell works to people unfamiliar with them.

Works cited:

With the exception of the last cited work not being formatted properly, the works cited page is excellent.

Grammar and typos:

• There are a number of typos in this document.
  • “As traditional combustion engines emit carbon dioxide, fuel cells are a low or zero emission alternative that can mitigate the climate crisis…”
    • Considering that this sentence is comparing combustions engines to fuel cells, the sentence should start with the conjunction: “Whereas”.
  • “fuel cells (a hydrogen powered device that produces electricity)…”
    • The term “fuel cells” is plural while “a hydrogen powered device” is singular. This needs correcting.
  • A period is incorrectly placed between the first two sentences explaining figure 1.

Concluding remarks:

Your definition is informative and well organized, thank you. The following changes will make this an excellent document.

• Editing for typos and grammar is need (see the above)
• Reformatting the works cited section

Thank you. I would be happy to answer any questions.