To Dale Miller, ENGL 301 Student
From : Harvey Dhaliwal, ENGL 301 Student
Peer Review / Term: Standup
First Impressions:
The assignment was excellent overall. It was well organized, informative, and addresses the situation appropriately. Some suggestions have been provided for improvement below.
Organization:
- Thoughtfully laid out, well organized structure.
- Excellent use of bolded headings to label each definition type.
Introduction:
- Clearly states the purpose of the assignment and criteria.
- Reading situation is stated, the level of detail and language used is appropriate.
Definitions:
- Parenthetical definition is easy to understand and provides context for a situation where the term can be used.
- Perhaps removing “our” from the definition would make it more generalized.
- Sentence definition is informative and flows well.
- Replacing the term “blockers” with a more commonly understood term may provide more clarity. Are “blockers” specifically people, resources, or any hinderances at all?
Expansion Methods:
- Four expansion methods: Operating Principle, Visuals, Required Conditions, and Examples are clearly present.
- Presentation of three required conditions is particularly helpful and informative.
- Use of Agile framework as an example for where standups are used is excellent.
Visuals:
- Some components (scrum master, burn down/up chart) are not immediately relevant and not explained in the text.
- An image more specific to standups specifically may be more appropriate and beneficial, rather than focusing on the Agile framework.
Style:
- Professionally written, any use of specialized terms is clearly explained (ex. sprints).
- Some areas can be edited for conciseness, in both cases the two words used are similar enough to choose just one:
- Expanded definition paragraph 3, line 4 (“advice or input”)
- Expanded definition paragraph 3, line 5 (“concerns or problems”)
- The final sentence of the third paragraph in the expanded definition can be shortened and broken into two sentences to clarify which idea is being cited.
Works Cited:
- Formatting of webpages in reference list is not consistent with MLA or APA format.
- Titles should be placed in quotations while website names should be italicized in MLA format, refer to Purdue OWL MLA or APA guide for useful information.
Concluding Comments:
- Visual more specific to standups would enhance clarity
- Revising for conciseness suggested
- Reworking citations to match MLA or APA style (see above)
It was a pleasure reviewing your assignment and learning more about this term which was previously foreign to me. I hope that you found my comments useful. If you would like to discuss any of my points further, please feel free to contact me.
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