Peer Review of Kristy’s Definition

Peer review:

To: Kristy Vyfschaft

From: Lovin Kahlon

Date: June 9, 2022

Peer review/ Term: Endodontic therapy.

 

Thank you for submitting the definition assignment 1:3; you have done good work. Please see the review of the document below with suggestions for improvements.

 

• First Impressions:

Your report is well organized, and the terms are explained clearly. The content in the report follows the steps outlined in the assignment document.

 

• Organization and Content:

It might be better to make the headings bolder and there should be less space between them, especially the last heading. Use a smaller font for in-text source citing below the figure so it can be easily identified as a citation. Simple language and avoiding dental jargon will make the report easier to read. For example, terms such as hard tissue and soft tissue can be confusing without an adequate explanation.

 

• Definitions:

Under expanded definition, consider comparing or contrasting it to a routine dental procedure such as a filling so you can clarify the differences. The parenthetical definition should only include clarifying phrases in parentheses.

 

• Visuals:

Figure 1 is particularly labelled with many terms, which may be confusing for some. It may be helpful to find a visual that has fewer terms and can be more clear to your audience.

• Grammar/Typos:

There are some grammatical errors, particularly a lack of adjectives; one example is: “Inside the tooth, under the hard tissues, there is soft tissue called the pulp”.

Please correct to: “Inside the tooth, under the hard tissues, there is a soft tissue called the pulp”.

Using “hyphens” would also ensure that ambiguity is avoided; for example: “ The dental infection can spread to other teeth and through the body, potentially becoming life threatening”.

Please correct to: “The dental infection can spread to other teeth and through the body, potentially becoming life-threatening”.

 

• Works Cited:

Your citations are excellent

 

• Conclusion:

Correct headings and font size

Using simple language and avoiding dental jargon for easy reading

Reviewing Parenthetical and comparing/contrasting expanded definition

The visual in Figure 1 is too busy, so rearrange and use relevant terminology as per the definition.

Edit for grammar.

 

I hope my recommendations are helpful to you.