Peer Review of Jessica’s Definitions

To: Jessica Barlescu

From: Anushka Nair

Date: 11th June 2022

Subject: Peer Review/ Term: Attachment theory

Thank you for submitting the definition assignment for lesson 1:3. This was very informative and is an enjoyable read. Please see the review of the document below with suggestions for improvements.

First Impressions:

This work is very impressive, especially for readers who are not familiar with the term “attachment theory” or the field of psychology. The assignment is organized really well with helpful visuals that clarify the definition further. However, certain parts of your content need to be refined. Please see below.

Organization:

• A clear and concise introduction. The mention of the fields in which attachment theory is used in is appreciated as it helps the readers with context.
• The document is well organized. The subheadings are relevant and to-the-point which makes the document easy to follow
• Visuals are good and they help with the definition, however,  moving the label below the visual with a smaller font would make the document easier to read.

Expression:

• The tone is very professional and caters to the audience of non-technical readers.
• Some phrases and terms could perhaps use parenthetical definitions 
  • For example, in the sentence “based it on ethology, control systems theory, and psychoanalytic thinking which was a concept introduced to psychology by Freud”, terms such as “ethology”, and “control systems theory” might benefit from further clarification to help readers who don’t have a psychology background.

Content:

• The document meets all the assignment requirements; it includes
  • A detailed introduction
  • Three forms of definition
  • Four types of expansion in the expanded definition
  • A visual
  • Works cited list  
• If the example could be expanded it would make the definition stronger 

This definition is very informative and the writing is incredibly strong. Hopefully, these recommendations will help further strengthen the definition. Thank you and please feel free to ask any questions.  

Jessica Barlescu – Definitions assignment