To: Helen Zhou
From : Sangita Dutta
Peer Review
Term: Random Access Memory (RAM)
Definition under review: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl30199c2022w2/2023/02/08/three-definitions-of-random-access-memory-ram/
Thank you for your three definitions on Random Access Memory. You did a great job! I would like to offer some feedback that you may find helpful in reviewing.
First Impressions:
Your document is very well structured, making it clear and easy to read. Your definitions are concise and effectively conveys the definitions of Random Access Memory (RAM) at different levels of detail.
Organization:
- The three definitions are clearly separated with individual headings.
- Expanded definition contain subheadings to clearly organize different information.
- Overall organization of document has good flow.
Expression:
- Expressions used in document has the right level of complexity for target audience.
- Overall tone of document is professional and technical.
Content:
- The three definitions provided in document are great examples of parenthetical, sentence, and expanded definitions.
- For the parenthetical definition, perhaps you could start the sentence defining RAM instead of including it as an example, as it does not clearly convey the purpose of RAM.
- Document meet all assignment requirements.
- Your target audience is very specific, you could consider broadening the intended audience so it can be accessible to more people.
Concluding Comments:
- The document was able to effectively define Random Access Memory in three different distinct categories of definitions. Below are some suggestions that you could take into consideration:
- For the parenthetical definition, consider defining what is RAM in the main sentence instead of using it as an example.
- Broaden the target audience slightly, so the document can be accessible to more people.
Overall, the document was well structured and interesting to read, thank you for your document. Let me know if you have question on any of the feedback provided.
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