Assignment 2.1: Peer Review of Chris’s Formal Proposal

To: Chris Wu

From: Sonja Tang

Peer Review: Proposal for promoting healthy sleep habits among UBC students

I appreciate your submission of the interesting proposal. I throughly enjoyed the reading experience.

First Impressions:

• The proposal above is well–structured and thorough.
• It clearly outlines the statement of the problem, proposed solution, scope, methods, qualifications, and conclusion.
• It also provides a comprehensive overview of the potential issues UBC students are facing with sleep, and how the proposed program can help address them.
• The proposal is clear and concise, and the author demonstrates a clear understanding of the issue and an appropriate plan of action.

Literature Review and Statement of Problem:

• Provides an effective overview of the key issues surrounding the inadequate and poor quality sleep that UBC students face as well as clearly outlines the negative effects of sleep deprivation and the need for a program to promote healthy sleep habits.
• The statement of problem effectively identifies the root cause of the problem, namely the lack of prioritization of sleep and the challenges of transitioning to university.
• Recommend adding more specific examples and sources to support claims

Proposed Solution:

• Addresses the issue of poor sleep habits among UBC students in a comprehensive manner. It covers the need for sleep education, creating a conducive sleep environment in student housing, promoting relaxation techniques, and offering flexible class schedules
• Good start, but there may be other measures that could be taken to further promote healthy sleep habits, such as providing resources for mental health support, or offering incentives for students to engage in healthy sleep habits.

Scope:

• The scope of this proposal is comprehensive and provides a thorough overview of the proposed program, including the components, methods, and qualifications.
• It also provides a set of questions to assess the feasibility of the program.
• Suggest including a timeline for the implementation and assessment of the program to ensure that it is effective and efficient in achieving its goals.
• Additionally, it would be beneficial to consider the potential impact of the program on the wider student population and include a discussion on how it could be scaled or adapted for different cultural backgrounds and needs.

Methods and Timeline:

• Clearly presented and well-organized methodology and timeline
• Covers essential elements of a sleep promotion program such as sleep education, sleep environment, relaxation techniques, and flexible class schedules.
• Additionally, the survey proposed is a useful tool to assess the demand for such a program.
• It would be beneficial to also include focus groups and interviews to gain further insight into the experiences and needs of UBC students when it comes to sleep. This could provide further information on potential barriers and solutions to implementing a successful sleep promotion program.

Grammar and Technical Errors:

• No significant grammar or technical errors found
• Writing is clear and easy to understand

Works Cited:

• This is missing from the proposal, it would be helpful if you can add it to the end of your proposal.

Conclusion Comment:

• Overall, your proposal is well-structured and provides a feasible solution for promoting healthy sleep habits among UBC students.
• Recommendations to clarify and add details will strengthen the proposal and ensure the research is comprehensive, as well as a work cited section.

Thank you for the great proposal. Feel free to reach out to me if you have any questions