By Tanya Mozafari on February 28, 2023
To: Sangita Dutta, English 301 Student
From: Tanya Mozafari, English 301 Student
Date: February 28, 2023
Subject: Peer Review of Formal Report Proposal
Thank you for this enjoyable read that provided a clear understanding of the importance of providing ergonomic study setups for students at UBC, and how to effectively implement them.
First Impressions:
The organization of your proposal is commendable, as it flows logically and coherently. Your writing is professional, articulate, and engaging, making it easy to comprehend and follow your arguments.
Organization:
The proposal is well-organized, with a clear introduction, problem statement, proposed solution, scope, methods, and qualifications sections. The references cited in the proposal provide a good basis for the proposed solution, making it more supported and credible.
Introduction:
- The essence of the report is captured concisely, professionally, and clearly, making it easy to understand and follow.
Statement of Problem:
The statement of problem effectively portrays the repercussions of outdated chairs causing students discomfort and discouraging them from studying on campus.
- It may be useful to also mention potential health issues caused by the lack of ergonomic chairs on campus.
Proposed Solution:
The proposed solution to renovate study spaces with ergonomic setups is creative and practical, providing a clear solution to the problem presented.
Scope:
The questions in the scope section are thought-provoking and demonstrate a thorough understanding of the problem.
- It might be beneficial to combine the first two inquiries to avoid redundancy and create more space for other important inquiries.
Methods:
The methods used in the proposal are effective, providing a reliable basis for the proposed solution.
- Specifying the mode of survey administration (online or paper-based) in the methods section could improve the proposal further.
Qualifications:
The qualifications section showcases personal insight and expertise, providing credibility to the proposal.
- Mentioning any relevant coursework or extracurricular activities related to ergonomics or healthcare could add more depth to the qualifications section.
Grammar and Technical Errors:
The writing in the proposal is well-structured, free of typos, and follows proper grammar rules, showcasing the writer’s attention to detail and excellent writing skills. There are no major technical errors or omissions found, making the proposal an effective and persuasive argument for improving student study setups at UBC.
Revisions:
Overall, this is an impressive proposal that effectively outlines the need for ergonomic study setups at UBC and provides a well-constructed solution. The organization, references, and writing are all highly commendable, and the thought-provoking scope questions and effective methods add to the proposal’s strength. Improvement could be made by:
- Combining two scope questions
- Specifying the survey’s mode
- Further demonstrating qualifications by mentioning previous coursework
Thank you for the insightful proposal, it was a pleasure to read. Please reach out to me if you have any questions.
Formal Report Proposal: Extending Ergonomic Setup in Student Study Areas
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