To: Cheka Duheme, ENGL 301 Student
From: Carman Chu. ENGL 301 Student
Date: April 3, 2023
Subject: Peer Review of Formal Report Draft on “How to Better Support Note-Takers to Improve Learning Experience for Students at UBC”
Dear Cheka,
Thank you for submitting your Formal Report Draft on “How to Better Support Note-Takers to Improve Learning Experience for Students at UBC.” Please read the following feedback from my peer review.
First Impressions
The formal report draft is well-written and organized. There are not many corrections to be made other than some minor grammatical errors. The report “How to Better Support Note-Takers to Improve Learning Experience for Students at UBC” provides background information on note-taking and what a note-taker is. The data is sufficient for the purpose of the study and provides additional information on the general consensus of the opinions of note-takers and students.
Content
- Introduction
- Very informative, with definitions of note-taker, note-taking and background information on the note-taking program for better reader understanding
- Flow of introduction is good, starting from background information, definitions, the purpose of study, audience, and scope of inquiry
- States purpose of the study and proposed audience
- Can easily be understood by someone without prior knowledge of note-taking
- Data Analysis
- Clear and well-labelled visuals for better reader understanding
- Efficiently explained data
- Student Survey section could be better explained for clarity
- Are the students who participated in this survey note-users or student note-takers?
- Explains the process of data collection and surveying
- Data could’ve been more accurate with a bigger participant pool
- Effectively used illustrations to help explain data
- Conclusion
- Has a summary of report, a list of recommendations and limitations
- Gives feasible solutions to the proposed problem in the report
- Explains in detail why these recommendations would help
- Provides reasoning for limitation and what could be done to allow the report to excel
- Clear and concise with recommendations
- Minor grammatical errors
- verb tense
- unnecessary use of articles
Organization
- Good flow of points; data analysis is explained in an organized manner
- Pages are numbered properly
- Effectively labelled headlines and subheadings that show the contents of the paragraphs
- Points connected to others, with sentences flowing into the next paragraph smoothly
- No unnecessary information; content is clear and concise and makes sense with the topic of research
Style
- Tone is positive and clear
- Reflects and maintains the “you-attitude” throughout the formal draft
- Certain points could be explained more (data analysis on student surveys)
- could explain in detail if the student surveys are students who use the notes from note-takers or are they student note-takers
- Minor grammatical errors
- wordy in some areas
- punctuation mistakes
- Nicely written references with clear sections
Design
- Graphics are well-labelled and clear, very easily understood
- Illustrations integrated into the report nicely and goes with the flow
- Clearly explained in the report what is shown in graphics
- Aesthetics of graphs are visually appealing, fonts are a good size and can be seen clearly
Thank you for reading over the feedback on my peer review for you. If you need additional information, feel free to reach me at carmancchu@gmail.com.
Link to Cheka’s Formal Report Draft: Cheka’s Formal Report Draft
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