Peer Review: Formal Report Draft

To: Helen Zhou, English 301 Student, hzhou2@student.ubc.ca

From: Tanya Mozafari, English 301 Student, tanyamozafari@gmail.com

Subject: Peer Review of Formal Report Draft

Date: April 3, 2023

Your report titled “Increasing Access and Awareness to the AMS Food Bank for UBC Students” was a valuable read. Being a UBC student myself and strongly supporting the cause of food security, I fully recognize the significance of your findings and proposals. Please find my feedback and suggestions below:

Title Page:

• The title page of the report is presented in a clear and professional manner, with legibility being a notable aspect.
• The title itself serves its purpose effectively, providing a concise and informative summary of the report’s content.

Table of Contents:

The table of contents is appropriately formatted, with clear and systematic organization of headings and subheadings using numbers, roman numerals, and letters.

Introduction:

• To cater to the intended audience, the introduction includes an introductory definition of Food Security, Food Insecurity and Food Accessibility Resources.
• The statistical information on the magnitude of food insecurity as a larger issue is informative and well-supported with references skillfully providing a strong background for the intended audience.
• The report’s purpose is emphasized through a compelling introduction that highlights the detrimental effects of food insecurity on the health and wellbeing of UBC students.
• The research methods and scope of inquiry are clearly defined which are well documented in the rest of the report.

Data Sections:

• The supporting images included in the report are highly beneficial in aiding the reader to comprehend the survey’s context.
• The Summary of Secondary Research in Data Section 1 offers a significant level of insight. The 2019 AMS Student Experience survey is compelling evidence of the prevalence of food insecurity on campus, which is further supported by the survey data presented in this report.
• The figures from the survey are presented in a highly comprehensible manner and are perfectly suited to the report’s purpose.
• Data Section 2 provides a comprehensive and enlightening overview of the current challenges faced in promoting access and awareness of the AMS Food Bank.
• The proposed solution, which involves increasing funds to promote the AMS Food Bank, is a well-conceived and logical approach.

Conclusion

Your work was a delightful read. The subject you have selected is relevant and deserving of the extensive research you have conducted. The adeptness in maintaining a professional tone through your writing is clearly evident, and your design choices are impressive and serve as excellent supporting elements for your work. To further enhance your work, I would like to offer the following suggestions:

• It might be beneficial to explore additional methods that the AMS Food Bank can employ to increase its funding.
• Consider discussing the availability, or lack thereof, of healthy food options at the AMS Food Bank, which could be another obstacle or deterrent to access.
• Perhaps Data Section 3 could simply be labeled “Proposed Solution and Feasibility” as there doesn’t seem to be any new data introduced.

References

• The document demonstrates proper implementation of MLA citations.
• The reference list is accurately formatted.

Final Comments

Thank you for your for your dedication to addressing food insecurity among UBC students. Your work effectively conveys the report’s purpose and underscores the importance of finding a solution. The document’s flow is smooth and coherent, and all the information presented is pertinent and enhances the report’s overall effectiveness. Please feel free to contact me at tanyamozafari@gmail.com if you have any queries.

Helen’s Formal Report Draft