Peer Review of Christ’s Assignment (Revised)

ENGL 301 Peer Review

To: ChirstWu

From: Chohyeon Kim

Definition link:  ChristWuDefinition

(https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl30199c2022w2/2023/02/08/assignment-1-3-three-definitions/)

 

Peer Review/ term: Phototropism

Thank you for submitting the writing on the topic of Phototropism. Below is my evaluation of the document, along with suggestions for its improvement.

First Impressions:

• The writing on Phototropism is well-researched and written in a clear and concise manner, suitable for the target audience of third-year Biology students in a Plant Biology course.
• The introduction sets a good stage for the topic but could benefit from the addition of a visual element to make the information more accessible to the reader.
• The parenthetical definition of Phototropism is succinct but incorrect, and should be revised to include parentheses.
• The content provides an appropriate level of detail for the target audience and covers the history, background, negation, and operating principle of Phototropism, with a well-chosen example to illustrate the concept in action.
• The writing is missing in-text citations, and could benefit from additional outside references to provide more context and support for the information presented.

Content and Expression:

• The parenthetical definition provides a succinct explanation of Phototropism.
• It is an appropriate level of detail for the target audience and the situation described.
• The sentence definition expands upon the parenthetical definition by providing more detail about the process of Phototropism.
• The language used is clear and easy to understand, making it well-suited for the target audience.
• The section on history and background provides a historical background of the term Phototropism and explains its importance in various physiological functions.
• The information is well-researched and provides a good understanding of the topic.
• The section on negation provides a clear explanation of the absence of Phototropism and the factors that could contribute to it.
• The section on the operating principle provides a clear explanation of how Phototropism works, including the conversion of mechanical forces into biochemical signals.
• The example given helps to bring the topic to life and provides a concrete illustration of Phototropism in action.
• The example is well chosen and helps to deepen the understanding of the topic for the reader.

 

Visuals:

• Consider adding at least one visual to help reinforce the concept and make the information more accessible to the reader.

 

Work Cited:

• The work cited provides the source for the information in the writing, demonstrating that the information is well-researched and credible.
• Consider adding more outside references to provide additional context and support for the information presented in the assignment.

 

Grammar and Typos:

There were no grammar issues or typos in the assignment.

 

Concluding Comments:

• The writing is well-researched and written in a clear and concise manner, making it suitable for the target audience.
• The use of different levels of definition is effective and the explanation of the topic is thorough and easy to understand.
• The writer has done a good job of presenting the information in a way that is relevant and accessible to the target audience.
• Consider adding at least one visual and more references to make the writing an even more comprehensive and effective resource for readers.

 

Thank you, Chris, if you have any questions, don’t hesitate to ask. It was a delight to review your work.

 

Chohyeon Kim