To: Long You
From : Chohyeon Kim
Peer Review : Proposal for Encouraging TWU Students to Participate in Exercise at City of Richmond’s City Center Community Center
I appreciate your submission of the interesting proposal. It was a delightful reading experience.
First Impressions:
- Well-structured proposal that is easy to understand
- Introduction sets context for problem and proposed solution is logical
- Areas that require additional clarification and details
Literature Review and Statement of Problem:
- Concise and relevant summary of motivations and barriers for exercising
- Recommend adding more specific examples and sources to support claims
- Consider integrating theoretical framework
Proposed Solution:
- Well-considered proposal that identifies unique motivations and barriers for TWU students
- Recommend adding more information on how research results will be used to design next campaign and providing more details on methodology for data analysis
Scope:
- Relevant and useful investigation questions to understand behavior and preferences of TWU students regarding exercise
- Exploration of frequency of exercise, preferred exercise types, and barriers to participation can provide valuable insights for designing effective marketing strategies
- Questions about motivation and importance of fitness facilities near campus can provide additional context for understanding student behavior
Methods and Timeline:
- Clearly presented and well-organized methodology and timeline
Grammar and Technical Errors:
- No significant grammar or technical errors found
- Writing is clear and easy to understand
Works Cited:
- This is an excellent list of cited works.
Conclusion Comment:
- Overall, your proposal is well-structured and provides a feasible solution for encouraging TWU students to exercise at City of Richmond’s City Center Community Center
- Recommendations to clarify and add details will strengthen the proposal and ensure the research is comprehensive
Thank you for the great proposal. Feel free to reach out to me if you have any questions
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