Assignment 2.1 – Peer Review of Alethea’s Formal Report Proposal

Date: February 27, 2023

To: Alethea Kramer

From: Cheka Duheme

Thank-you for submitting your formal report proposal for “Increasing Opportunities for Casual and Unplanned Interactions Between Team Members” for Lesson 2, Unit 1. It was a pleasure to read. Please check the following suggestions below:

Link To Formal Report Proposal

• Alethea’s Formal Report Proposal for Increasing Opportunities for Casual and Unplanned Interactions Between Team Members

First Impression

At first glance, the formal report proposal has an organized structure. The organization allows for a smooth and enjoyable reading experience. The introduction provides the context and purpose of the research. Furthermore, the problem and the solution are realistic and achievable in the time-frame required for the assignment.

Organization & Expression

• The writing is succinct.
• The tone is both pleasant and professional.
• The language used is simple enough for any level of reader to understand.
• The bolded headings make the formal report proposal easy to read.
• The six methods of inquiry should be numbered instead of bullet-pointed.

Proposed Problem

• The author states that there is a lack of casual/impromptu workplace interactions occurring within the Digital Services Team.
• The author goes into great depth about the limited opportunities to facilitate casual/impromptu interactions between team members.

Proposed Solution

• The proposed solutions is increase in-person interactions and/or implement digital tools to for impromptu/casual bonding.
• The proposed solutions are clearly-stated in the formal report proposal.
• Details about the proposed solutions could benefit being rewritten for reader clarity.
• Adding a bullet-point to each solution to give detail would be more cohesive.
• Adding bullet-points would give your readership a complete picture of each solution.

Scope of Research

• The six methods of inquiry focus on the work preferences and investigate digital tools that can facilitate interactions.

• The six methods of inquiry should be numbered instead of bullet-pointed.

• The six methods of inquiry are clearly-stated to the audience.

• The six methods of inquiry are appropriate and beneficial in understanding the behaviours and preferences of team members in the department.

Methods of Research

• The primary method of utilizing anonymous surveys is a feasible way to conduct the research for the topic.
• The primary method will be effective managing time and upholding the university’s ethical standards for research.
• The primary method will allow for a fully-developed picture in understanding the behaviours and preferences of team members.
• The author could leverage scholarly research as a secondary resource. Articles that discuss a combination of issues like isolation, work-from-home, or COVID-19.

Grammar and Technical Errors

Minor grammar and technical errors have been found in this submission. Be mindful of issues like punctuation, article usage, and spelling:

• “The manager of The Digital Services team is responsible for decision-making on team activities and organization…”
• “The absence of these interactions can lead to workplace isolation and poor performance, which can prevent personal development and disruption to the team’s productivity…”
• “The survey will be distributed directly to The Digital Services team members and posted to a community of co-op students in the same field who work online…”

A few sentences can be re-written to improve paragraph flow or conciseness:

• “The Digital Services team’s manager is responsible for decision-making on team activities and organization…”
• “I plan to pursue these six areas of inquiry to assess the methods for increasing causal and unplanned professional interactions between team members…”
• “The primary method will be creating and distributing a survey to examine and evaluate online or hybrid workers’ experience…”

Qualifications

• The author is currently on a co-op at Digital Services Team.
• The author’s qualifications are suitable for the research topic.

Concluding Comments

Overall, the formal report proposal was interesting and informative. Here are a few suggestions to improve your formal report proposal:

• Correct the issues with grammar (punctuation, article usage, and spelling). 
• Rewording sentences to improve conciseness.
• Rewording sentences to improve the flow of writing. 
• Changing six lines of inquiry to a numbered list.
• Consider suggestion with using a secondary resource for research.

Great job on your formal report proposal! Thank-you for taking the time to read this feedback. Please reach out if you would like discuss any of the feedback.