To: Danae Echeverria, ENGL 301 team member
From: Peter Yang, ENGL 301 Student
Date: 10, June 2022
Subject: Expanded definition, Romanticism
First Impressions
I have read over your first draft and I think you did a great job on this assignment. I can tell that you are very familiar with this term based on how clear you are with explaining the term. That being said, as a non-technical reader, I could easily understand what Romanticism means. Here are some of my comments:
Voice:
- the voice throughout the assignment is appropriate and understanding.
- maintained a professional tone throughout the document without any jargon
- went straight to the point and kept it simple.
- does not show any wordiness
Clarity
- I find your assignment very specific and very clear in explaining the different definitions, facts and examples
- you did a great job explaining the history of romanticism
- images really helped clarify what it is.
- please talk a little more about neoclassicism since not many people know the word
- your example of the French Revolution and the examples of Romanticism is very interesting
- The summary at the end of the document is also done very well.
- the explanation of the figures gives a context of what it meant instead of just an image.
Grammar
Your grammar is great. I really can’t find any mistakes.
Organization
- well done with the organization
- starting with an overview of what will be discussed in the assignment gives the reader about
- a great job in the use of headlines,
- adds a type of flow throughout the assignment
- the images that you chose provide a good visual representation of what is romanticism
Citations
- adding some more citations to the document would strengthen your assignment.
- you can insert a citation for this:” In the 18th century, the term developed in close association with Romantique, connoting a tendency towards romantic ideas, in which case the word-forming element “ism” highlights its status as an artistic movement.”
- Adding some citations in the history section
Please note:
- More citations
- more informationabout neoclassicism
Overall, I enjoyed reading your document and learned a lot about Romanticism., Thank you for the detailed explanation of the term. I hope my comments and suggestions are useful.