Revised Peer Review of the Definition Assignment

To: Dhara, Technical Writing Team Member

From: Christine, Technical Writing Team Member

Date: Feb 4th, 2022

Peer Review / Term: Algorithm

Congratulations, and thank you for posting the 1.3 assignment. Please consider reading through the peer review document below with suggestions for improvement.

First Impressions: 

This impressive document includes a well-organized structure, good visual cited adequately, and propitiate reference list.

Organization:

• Excellent work on organizing the document to make it pleasant to read.
  • An Introduction with detailed information
  • The bolded heading is easy to read
  • Figures with correct citation

Expression: 

• The understanding of the definition is well expressed throughout the entire document.
• Overall, the tone is friendly and professional; however, if the document could be more concise, it could make the points more transparent.
• Some sentences can be more direct. For example:
  • “A common example of an algorithm is a cake recipe, where a sequence of steps are followed to accomplish the task of baking a cake.”
    • The passive voice and the wordy preface can create a clarity problem.
    • Rewrite example: A cake recipe is a typical example of an algorithm; making cakes takes a sequence of steps.
  • “All algorithms can be produced with just three basic building blocks: sequence selection and interaction.”
    • Rewrite example: Sequence, selection, and iteration are the three basic building blocks to produce algorithms.

Content: 

• The document followed the instruction of the 1.3 assignment, which includes
  • Summary of the assignment; introduction
  • The situation indicates the potential audience
  • Three forms of definition: parenthetical definition, sentence definition, and expanded definition
  • Four types of expansion definition
  • One visual
  • A reference list in MLA format
• Include the ‘why’ Algorithms are used in computing.

Visuals: 

• Well done on the visual.
  • The picture is well explained, labelled and cited.

Work Cited List: 

• Excellent on the work cited list-  however, a small error occurred.
• Don’t forget to put “.” behind the name of the author
  • Rewrite: Ashwani, KJunior. “Complete Tutorials of Introduction to Algorithm.” DevOpsSchool.com, 10 June 2021, https://www.devopsschool.com/blog/complete-tutorials-of-introduction-to-algorithm/

Grammar and Typos: 

• There are several minor grammar errors; one example is: “A common example of an algorithm is a cake recipe, where a sequence of steps are followed to accomplish the task of baking a cake.”
  • Please note that “a sequence of steps” is singular and “are” is plural; this needs correction.

Concluding Comments: 

Thank you! It’s been a pleasure to review your definition document that is informative and well organized. With the following suggestions, this will be an excellent document:

• Self-editing for clarity is needed:
  • Grammar
  • Choice of passive or active voice

Thank you for your time in reading through the peer review document. Please feel free to ask any questions.

Cheers.

Three Definitions on “Algorithm”