TO: Ali Hasan

FROM: Katherine Chan

DATE: Feb 5, 2022

SUBJECT: Peer Review / Term: Programming

 

Thank you for submitting the definition assignment for 1:3. Great work on a clear introduction. Please see the review below for some suggestions.

 

Initial Impressions:

Great job introducing the assignment and succinctly establishing the situation and defining the purpose.

 

Organization:

• Good spacing between definitions.
• Bolding the headings will increase readability and flow.
• The title for the figure does not follow the example in the textbook.
  • For example, include source citation below the figure title.

 

Expression:

• Overall, the assignment is well-written and concise.
• There is an opportunity to remove redundancy. For instance:
  • “Lovelace used programming to write an algorithm for her project, the “Analytical Engine”, where it was the first computer program.”
  • The previous sentence states that “…the first programming language was created by Ana Lovelace.”
  • A possible suggestion is to the remove “where it was the first computer program.”

 

Content:

• The assignment is complete and includes all the requirements. Excellent work!
• The three citations are professional web sites. Implementing a journal article can increase the reliability of the assignment.

 

Visuals:

• Enlarge the figure because it is difficult to read.

 

Works Cited List:

• Correct APA style is applied.

 

Grammar and Typos:

• There are a number of errors using periods. For example:
  • “Lovelace used programming to write an algorithm for her project, the ‘Analytical Engine’, where it was the first computer program. (HP 2018)”
  • This needs correction with the period at the end of the in-text citation.
  • Additionally, a period goes inside closing quotation marks. For example:
    • ‘Hello World’.

 

Concluding Comments:

Thank you for sharing thoughtful and informative definitions. The assignment is a great first draft and with some suggested revisions it will be exceptional:

• Bolding headings will increase flow and readability
• Correcting periods and figure title and source are necessary
• Amending redundancy will improve clarity and maximize impact

 

I hope my recommendations are helpful as you complete this assignment. Please let me know if you have any questions. Good luck!