Comments on Yirun(Ryan) Li’s Blog

In one of Yirun(Ryan) Li’s posts:

ThinkPad vs. Think Different: Apple under Jobs was entrepreneurial.

He talked about the Apple company’s products are a great success comparing with Think Pad under entrepreneurial leading of the firm’s former CEO and co-founder, Steve Jobs.

Actually he did not say much about the Think pad, instead, he use nearly the whole post to address the all-known features of Apple company and its products. This makes the comparison in the title no sense that the reader of this post could not have an access to one of the two.

To make a comparison, we should describe clearly both advantage and disadvantage aspects of the two things, so that we could prove our conclusion to be right and true, persuading the reader to agree with our opinion.

What’s more, he indeed talked about Apple and Jobs, but he did not talk about ‘Apple under Jobs’,  which means he didn’t explain why Apple was  entrepreneurial under the control of Jobs. This would make readers confusing after finishing reading his post that they haven’t got the answer of this problem from the author, which should be avoided when writing a business blog.

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