My first peer review was for David Cheung, a member of my writing team. David wrote an informative and well-written document on the term ‘debasement.’ In my review, I highlight the missing assignment criteria: statement of target audience. Further, I suggest improvements to the organization and grammar of the document.
Peer Review for David
To: David Cheung
From : Nicole White
Subject: Peer Review
Term: Debasement
Thank you for the timely submission of the assignment for lesson 1:3. The parenthetical, sentence, and expanded definitions of ‘debasement’ are engaging and insightful. Please consider the following suggestions for improvement of the document.
Initial Impressions:
An excellent description was provided for the term ‘debasement.’ The definitions are easy to follow and each section included in this document is informative. The visual used to show the quality of the coins after debasement is terrific, but it needs a citation in the figure title. Furthermore, there should be a ‘reading situation’ described in the introduction.
Introduction:
The criteria for this assignment is properly stated in the introduction, and not too wordy. However, as per the assignment requirements, a targeted audience should be stated.
Organization:
- Overall, the document is well-structured and coherent
- For better readability, the reference header should be bolded
- The methods of expansion were used appropriately:
Expression:
- This document provides a straightforward description of the term ‘debasement’ to uninformed readers
- The language used is efficient and easily understandable, without being too simple
- Providing an origin of the term is very useful for the reader
- Depending on the audience, ‘monetary policy’ could be considered jargon.
Visuals:
- The visual used is interesting and effective at showing the effects of debasement in coins; however, the image should be larger.
- There should be a citation in the figure 1 title.
Reference List:
- Each citation is well organized and listed in alphabetical order. There is sufficient spacing between each reference, which increases overall readability.
Grammar:
- There are a few small grammatical errors from missing commas, for example : “Septimius Severus also debased his silver coinage (comma here) but he did so…”
Content:
This document meets all the requirements for the assignment. However, there is one criterion in that is missing:
- Description of ‘reading situation’
Final Impressions:
Overall, this document is very well done as it provides a clear and concise explanation of ‘debasement.’ Thank you for the submission, this is an interesting and educational read. Please consider the following recommendations for revision:
- Minor edits for improper grammar
- Bolding the reference header
- Figure citation and resizing
- Inclusion of a target audience in the introduction
Great work! Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any questions.