Revised Peer Review of a Formal Report

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To: Yury Zhuk

From: Priyanka Patel

Date: December 9, 2019

Subject: Peer review of Yury’s Formal Report Draft

 

Hi Yury,

 

I read your formal report draft of “Maximizing effectiveness of lecture capture systems in the statistics department at UBC”. Please see my feedback on the draft below.

Overall Document

  • The topic chosen for this report is very realistic and applicable.
  • Report clearly identifies and analyzes the problem, and recommends solution for it
  • All parts of the report are relevant to the reader

 

Content

  • Title page includes clear title, author name, date, and name and affiliation of the intended recipient
  • Table of content helps visualize the structure of the report
  • Background information is concise and identifies the problem
  • Data collection method is included
  • Purpose of the report and scope of inquiry is clear and leads to the body of the report
  • In text information from outside sources are cited
  • Data Provides balance through advantages and disadvantages of the proposal
  • Conclusion Interpretation is clear, accurate and briefly reflects the whole report
  • Good use of appendix to include surveys
  • Remember to include abstract at the beginning of the report
  • Consider using secondary research to support primary research
  • Provide recommendations under conclusion
  • Reference list and Appendix should start on a new page
  • Bibliography should be in MLA style

 

Organization

  • Draft is clear, easy to follow and visually appealing
  • Content is effective through use of headings and subheadings and connecting to one another
  • It’s good to include survey questions, but it might be okay to refer to appendix instead of stating them all under data section again.
  • Writing is brief – not too chunky, and overall carries out an objective and positive tone
  • No major grammar or spelling errors.

 

Design

  • Great use of visuals to present and help compare the survey responses instantly
  • Further discusses opportunities to balance disadvantages and provide realistic view
  • Report draft is reader-friendly and visually appealing
  • Survey charts should be labeled as figures to reference them easily in the body; also, it will be a good idea to include pages of these figures under table of content for quick reference

 

Comments and Recommendations

Overall the draft is clear and written parallel to the guidelines of the assignment. You seem to be on the right trach with your report and I hope my recommendations will help improve your report further:

  • Include abstract
  • Use figure numbers to label charts
  • Consider secondary research
  • Include recommendations under conclusion
  • MLA style references

 

I had a pleasure reviewing your assignment. Thank you and please contact me if you have any questions.

Link to Yury’s assignment: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99a-2019wa/2019/12/04/formal-report-draft-lecture-capture-systems/

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