{"id":81,"date":"2021-12-10T05:56:46","date_gmt":"2021-12-10T12:56:46","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/blogs.ubc.ca\/ptellierfolio\/?p=81"},"modified":"2021-12-10T05:58:59","modified_gmt":"2021-12-10T12:58:59","slug":"81","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/blogs.ubc.ca\/ptellierfolio\/2021\/12\/10\/81\/","title":{"rendered":"Peer Review of Three Definitions of Hyperinflation"},"content":{"rendered":"

The purpose of writing this memorandum was to learn the format of a common business document as well as learning to give well explained constructive criticism. This memo showcases written criticism that gives straightforward rationale for each suggestion.<\/p>\n

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MEMORANDUM<\/strong><\/p>\n

To: \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 Noah Saini, Student of UBC ENGL 301<\/p>\n

From:\u00a0 \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 Phillip Tellier, Student of UBC ENGL 301<\/p>\n

Date:\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 October 4, 2021<\/p>\n

Subject: \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 Peer Review of Three Definitions of Hyperinflation<\/p>\n

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On September 30, you posted three definitions of hyperinflation as part of an assignment. My new assignment is to peer review the definitions to help improve your writing.<\/p>\n

Initial Impressions:<\/strong><\/p>\n

While the information given was correct, some of the reasoning given to explain hyperinflation was incomplete, so it is more difficult to parse the meaning of the definition then it could be.<\/p>\n

Comments about Purpose and Audience:<\/strong><\/p>\n

The introduction to the three definitions explains who the audience is and says the purpose is to \u201cexplain to large customers what is happening in the economy\u201d. This is good except it does not explain what \u201clarge customers\u201d are. It would be better if it included why \u201clarge customers\u201d need to know about hyperinflation, and how this would lead them to make better decisions.<\/p>\n

Suggestions for an Improved Explanation:<\/strong><\/p>\n

Since you can not expect that customers who read the expanded definition will have read the sentence definition, the sentence definition you have would be a good way to start off your expanded definition. Currently, the expanded definition does not begin with an explanation of what inflation is. Also, in your sentence definition, \u201cinflation\u201d should be defined before \u201chyperinflation\u201d so that readers do not ask what \u201cinflation\u201d is when reading about \u201chyperinflation\u201d. There are some places where reasoning is not carried all the way through. This makes it difficult for readers who are new to the concept to follow along. For instance: Why does government spending cause inflation (sentence 3)? Why does the buying of non-perishable goods by panicked consumers raise prices (sentence 8)? How does diversifying your assets protect you from inflation (sentence 12)?<\/p>\n

Please note that the jargon \u201cdiversifying your assets\u201d may not be familiar to all customers.<\/p>\n

Missing Requirements for the Assignment:<\/strong><\/p>\n