To: Lea Ang Salamanca, Team Potluck Member<\/p>\n
From: Sidney Singh, Team Potlucker Reviewer<\/p>\n
Date: October 5, 2021<\/p>\n
Subject: Peer review of the definition of Vitamin K<\/p>\n
Dear Ms. Salamanca,<\/p>\n
Your definition of Vitamin K is very engaging and informative.<\/p>\n
Introduction:<\/strong> This section succesfully outlines the purpose of this assignment.<\/p>\n Reading Context:<\/strong> There was no reading context for the definition and therefore it was unclear if this definition was intended for someone with a background in health sciences.<\/p>\n Parentical Definition: <\/strong>Overall the definition is clear and concise.Simplifying the parentical definition could make it more accessbile for without a background in science. A possible revision could be; \u201cVitamin K (vitamin that supports blood clotting).<\/p>\n Sentence Definition:\u00a0<\/strong>This section is excellent as the definition is clear and is written as a complete sentence.<\/p>\n Expanded Definition:<\/strong>The methods of expansion used in this definition include: history, visuals, operating principle and required conditions. Overall,\u00a0 the expanded definition is\u00a0 clear and concise.The visuals were revelant to the topic and provided pertiant information. Below are a few suggestions to enhance clarity.<\/p>\n In paragraph one the opening sentences reads as follows, \u201cVitamin K was discovered in the 1920s when H.Dam, observed that chicks fed a cholesterol-free and low fat diet bled excessively, and their blood took a long time to clot. Upon discovering the missing vitamin, the Danish biochemist named it after the Danish word kogulation, which means coagulate.\u201d<\/p>\n It was unclear whether , \u201cthe Danish biochemist,\u201d referred to H. Dam or referred to a different individual.\u00a0 A suggested edit is as follows; \u201cH.Dam a Danish biochemist discovered Vitamin K in the 1920s.\u201d<\/p>\n Formatting:<\/strong> The second image featuring a vegetable and bottles does not have a caption. \u00a0Image 1,3,4 and 5 all have captions. Adding a caption to Image 2 may help in establishing consistency in the defintion.<\/p>\n For the parenthetical definition the word coagulation is written in blue.\u00a0 \u00a0I would suggest to rewrite the word coagulation in black.<\/p>\n References:<\/strong> References are cited correctly according to APA format.<\/p>\n It has been a pleasure peer reviewing your definition.\u00a0 Feel free to contact me at ssidney@student.ubc.ca if there are any further questions.<\/p>\n My Best Regards,<\/p>\n Sidney Singh<\/p>\n <\/p>\n <\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":" To: Lea Ang Salamanca, Team Potluck Member From: Sidney Singh, Team Potlucker Reviewer Date: October 5, 2021 Subject: Peer review of the definition of Vitamin K Dear Ms. Salamanca, Your definition of Vitamin K is very engaging and informative. Introduction:…<\/span><\/p>\n