My Peer Review
Peer review from Stephen Lui for my definitions document
Hi Barbra,
I reviewed your assignment of definition. Good job on the definition. Your definitions are clear and neat. However, I think the causes of nocturnal bruxism is a little bit lacking. With a more detailed causes would give the readers a clearer idea on the term.
Name of the Reviewer: Steven Lui
Author’s Name: Barbra Dobes
Title of the Expanded Definition: Nocturnal Bruxism
Initial Impressions: After my first time reading the article, I understand most of the material. The only thing I do not understand is in the picture of bruxism, the way of the teeth clenching up and down was a little bit confusing.
Purpose: The purpose of the definition was clearly and neatly defined. All parts of the documents are closely related to the intended purpose. However, more details for the causes of nocturnal bruxism will provide a greater insight for the readers.
Audience: As an audience without any dental knowledge, I found myself very easy to understand what nocturnal bruxism. In the sentence definition, the whole nocturnal bruxism process is clearly explained with simple and non-specific words. Jargon was not used in the article, so It is easier for audience without any dental knowledge to understand the article.
Organization: For the structure of the document, the introduction clearly described the reason of writing the definition of the term. The body includes multiple definition for the term. Adding a conclusion for the term might be helpful to explain the term to audience. One of the visual is a little bit confusing as the picture did not clearly illustrate how the clenching of the teeth actually works. Methods of expansion are used in the document, the causation of nocturnal bruxism, the meaning the two words, what can be done afterwards and the results of nocturnal bruxism are used as the expansion of the definition.
Addition comments: I think a little bit more in depth information for the causes of nocturnal bruxism would greatly help improving the documents. The results of nocturnal bruxism is the most effective element of this document, it is because bullet point of the result are clear and easy to understand. The word choice used are simple and the visual helped the audience to understand the whole term.