To: Junrong Zhu, classmate
From: Erin Mungham, classmate
Date: October 3, 2020
Subject: Peer review of your definition assignment
I have reviewed the first draft of your assignment defining the term “Modus Ponens”. You did a great job following the criteria and including three different types of definitions for this complex term. Your layout was well organized and the visual was a great way to help the reader understand Modus Ponens better. I would like to offer the following suggestions:
Citations: I noticed your bibliography had 4 references but there was only one in-text citation in your document. The references are there to give more information of the in-text citation. The citation that you did put was for Figure 1. I suggest when citing an image taken from the internet you put “Figure 1. Short explanation of image. (author, date).” So, for yours it should be “Figure 1. Modus Ponens. (Susanna, 2019).” This should be placed underneath the image. Also, your sentence definition has quotations but no in-text citation to follow. I would recommend putting an in-text citation whenever you are paraphrasing or directly quoting something.
Grammar: I noticed a few grammatical errors in your introduction. I would recommend taking your time when proofreading your work to ensure grammar mistakes are avoided. You want the introduction to have good flow and easy for your reader to follow and understand the purpose of the document. When there are grammatical errors it will distract the reader. For example, your first sentence should say “writing techniques and explain technical terms to a specific audience”. I have underlined the words that should replace what you have written. I would suggest reviewing your document one more time and keeping an eye out for those small grammar mistakes (especially words that should be plural or singular).
I hope my recommendations are helpful and act as a guide in your future writing assignments. You know how to organize your thoughts well on paper and you are able to provide detailed information without being too wordy. These are great writing skills to have. Please let me know if you have any questions.
Definition under review: Definition-Junrong-Zhu
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