TO: Shujun Peng
FROM: Annie Maurer
DATE: December 15, 2020
SUBJECT: Application Package Peer Review
Thank you for posting your application package for review. It was a pleasure to read this document and learn about your experiences. Please find my feedback below.
Content:
The resume summary section is strong, clear and well-written. The section provides a good overview of your skills and reasons why CustomCARE should select you for the tutoring position. The ail.com domain is under construction and not currently available.
The cover letter compliments the resume and provides additional relevant information about yourself. Specifically, the cover letter appears tailored to the position and provides specific information about how your previous experiences would be an asset at CustomCARE. Well done. One small note is that the LLC is an acronym for a type of company and not the company name itself. As well, perhaps the acronym IDST could be spelled out since the CustomCARE Team may not know what IDST stands for.
Visual Appeal
The resume, in particular, is highly visually appealing. It appears sleek and is nice to look at. White space is used effectively to draw attention to important areas. Differentiating the position titles from the surrounding text would highlight previous experiences more effectively. This could be achieved by bolding or increasing the font size of the waitress and tutor titles. This will make it easier for the potential employer to learn as much about you as possible on a quick scan. The left to right flow of the bottom section of the resume could be improved by spreading the education information more to the right side of the page.
Organization:
The four components of the application package are roughly laid out in a logical order. However, the resume is placed in the middle of the cover letter. Placing the resume after the cover letter will improve reader flow.
Grammar:
Overall, the grammar of the application package is great. There are a few mistakes in the letter requesting a reference. In the second paragraph, changing the word “motivate” to “motivating” would place the verb in the correct tense. An alternate suggestion that would make the sentence more concise is: “Having you as my co-worker has taught me the importance of caring for and motivating the students”. As well, there are a few minor mistakes in the final paragraph:
• “attacked” versus “attached”
• “concers” versus “concerns”
• period after the email address
Concluding Comments:
Overall, this is a great application package. The content is clear and concise and presents yourself as a good candidate for the tutoring position. Incorporating some of the content and organization suggestions, and fixing the few grammatical errors will improve the application package even more. I hope this feedback has been helpful.
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