Peer Review of Formal Report Proposal

To: Tamara Oman
From: Helene Tran
Subject: Peer Review of Proposal for reducing the environmental footprint at the Keller Williams Realty VanCentral office in Vancouver
Date: October 18, 2021

First Impressions
The “Proposal for reducing the environmental footprint at the Keller Williams Realty VanCentral office in Vancouver” is very informative and addresses the issue at hand. It is very well-structured and includes relevant information about the topic.

Organization

• The proposal is cohesive as each section flows well into each subsequent heading
• The use of subheadings organizes the information very well and allows for easy reading

Audience

• The intended audience is clearly defined at the beginning of the proposal
• The structure and language used is appropriate for the intended audience

Statement of Problem & Proposed Solution

• There is an evident link between deforestation and global greenhouse gas emissions
• The proposed solution of switching to a virtual platform, including the correlation with COVID-19, clearly demonstrates the need to switch to online solutions

Scope & Methods

• The questions proposed is extensive and will help to assess the feasibility of the solution
• The methods are clearly stated and correlate with the scope of the proposal

Grammar/Typos

• Adding punctuation (i.e., question marks) at the end of questions in the Scope section
• Rewording of some phrases such as “Real Estate is a pioneering industry who has adopted virtual platforms throughout this time” and substituting “who” for “that”
• “I will also conduct surveys to the office realtors regarding the demand and potential for cloud solutions” and substituting “to” with “from” or “I will distribute surveys to the office realtors…etc.”

Concluding Comments

• The proposal is well-organized and identifies a problem that needs to be addressed, especially in the current situation
• The solution seems feasible as demonstrated by the Scope and Methods

It was a pleasure to review your formal proposal and I hope these comments were helpful. Please let me know if you have any questions.

Link to proposal