To: Karissa Garneau, ENGL 301 Student
From: Zoe Maika, ENGL 301 Student
Title: Proposal for Improving Green Initiatives at The Tooth Gallery Dental Office in Ottawa
Date: October 18, 2021
First Impressions
The “Proposal for Improving Green Initiatives at The Tooth Gallery Dental Office in Ottawa” is well-structured and includes the necessary assignment requirements. It is an enjoyable and intriguing read about a very relevant topic.
Organization
- The use of subheadings allows for clear organization of sections and easy reading
- The proposal flows well with each section building upon the last
Audience
- The intended audience is clearly defined at the beginning of the proposal
- The structure and language used seems to be appropriate for the intended audience
Statement of Problem & Proposed Solutions
- The proposed solution of creating an environmental action plan is a great first step for improving green initiatives
- These two sections could use more detail – what are the dental materials exactly? How does this problem present itself specifically at The Tooth Gallery? What does an environmental action plan look like?
- “oral tissues”, “biological fluids”, and “dental materials” are all very vague terms and make this particular sentence challenging to understand. It might be helpful to be more specific
Scope & Methods
- The list of questions proposed is extensive and will surely provide insight on the feasibility of the solution
- Methods are clearly stated and make sense with the scope of the proposal
Grammar/Typos
- No grammatical errors or typos are present
Final Thoughts
- The proposal is well-organized and identifies a problem that is clearly prevalent within The Tooth Gallery and dental offices in general
- More detail and specificity is needed regarding the problem of dental office waste and the proposed solution of an environmental action plan
I hope you find these comments helpful. Please let me know if you have any questions. Thank you!
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