To: Catherine Yu, Student ENGL 301 Technical Writing UBC
From: Darius Zhag, Student ENGL 301 Technical Writing UBC
Date: November 19, 2021
Subject: Review of Formal Report Draft
Thank you for your submission of a well-composed draft detailing the potential issues around teaching evaluation. This formal report clearly illsutrates the need for a midterm teaching evaluation, the proposed solution to the stated problem is justified. Please see the review of the formal report draft with some suggestions for improvement.
First Impression:
This is a clear formal report draft that demonstrate critical thinking towards the proposed issues. The report communicates to its intended audience using a professional tone and appropriate level of accessibility. The report is well organized and contains all the necessary components in a formal report draft.
Introduction:
The introduction provides sufficient background information for the reader, and it is organized by subheadings. Each subheading is of appropriate length, and every concluding sentence in one paragraph is connected to the topic sentence of the next paragraph. It shows that the writer has strong writing skills. Overall, the introduction is very nicely written and pleasant to read.
Data Section:
The data section explains to the reader what are the primary sources and secondary sources. The literature review is nicely done, with some error to the in-text citation format. For example, under subheading a. “Student Evaluations of teaching” , the first in-text citation: (Kelly 4) is missing a comma, if the report is using the MLA citation style.
- One suggestion for this section is to pay attention to small details, the content of the data section is very nicely written.
- It could be better if the data section could include a link to the survey, so that the readers can know all the questions outlined in the survey.
Proposed solution:
The proposed solution which comes after the data and analysis part, should have its own section. In this way, the data section would not seem too long. One suggestion:
- It could be better if the proposed solution part can add a description of the potential limitation to the solution. For example, would it affect students’ grade if the teacher receive too much bad evaluation.
Conclusion
The conclusion is further divided into two parts, summary of the results and recommendation. It is nicely written and reminds the reader again of the logic of having a midterm evaluation.
Concluding comments:
Overall, the draft report is very detailed and beautifully written, I can really see your effort in this report, with small edits and more attention to details, I believe your final report is going to be very impressive. Keep up with the good work! If you have any questions, please feel free to email me.