Peer Review of Karissa’s Formal Report Draft

To: Karissa Garneau, ENGL 301 Student
From: Helene Tran, ENGL 301 Student
Date: November 19, 2021
Subject: Peer Review of Formal Report Draft

Initial Impressions

The report is informative and easy to follow
The writing is clear, and sections connect well throughout the paper
The use of figures and an organized format help the reader to better understand the information
The topic of the report and the importance of reducing waste at the dental office is immediately known

Title Page and Table of Contents

The title page looks professional and organized, and contains all the necessary information
The table of contents contains headings and subheadings that correspond to the body of the paper with correct page number labelling

Introduction

Clearly explains how dental offices are a significant contributor to environmental waste
Details the proposal of implementing an environmental action plan
Writing is professional and persuasive
Perhaps the introduction could use a subheading for the proposal of the environmental action plan and data collection implemented

Report, Data, and Analysis

Outlines the current practices at Tooth Gallery
Explains how data collected shows that many staff at Tooth Gallery are not aware or do not know how to implement environmentally friendly practices at the office
Use of subheadings makes the content clear and organized
Figures help the reader to understand the data better
Making references or explaining the figures in the body of the text would make the information more cohesive
Explores options for reusable alternatives to single-use products and ways to limit waste
Fig 2 was informative; however, it was a little confusing – should there be three pie graphs (since willingness, training, and use of green implementations independent of each other)?

Conclusion and Recommendations

Clearly outlines the issues covered in the report
List of recommendations align with the analysis and are presented in an organized list
Works cited list references all sources and uses proper MLA format
Consider adding the Appendix after the Works Cited page

Grammar & Spelling

Overall, there are minimal grammatical errors/spelling mistakes throughout the report
The running head should be “Improving” rather than “Impoving”
In the abstract, “Often business implement…” should be “Often businesses implement…”

Final Thoughts

The formal report draft is clear, well-structured, and organized
After reading the report, it is evident that dental offices produce a large ecological footprint and more sustainable choices can be made to reduce environmental waste

I hope my suggestions were helpful and if you have any questions or concerns, do not hesitate to contact me at helenet@student.ubc.ca.