ENGL 301: LinkedIn Peer Review Form
Here is an example of an excellent LinkedIn peer review to study: well organized, complete, concise and clear.
Please note the minimal use of pronouns: I / You / Yours
Please note the minimal use of imperative verbs
Date: xxx xxx
Peer Reviewer: xxxxx
Author: xxxxx
Title of document under review
LinkedIn URL: https://ca.linkedin.xxxxx
Hello xxx,
Thank you for submitting your LinkedIn profile for review, this is an impressive profile well organized and complete. Following are some comments and suggestions for improving the profile.
First Impressions
First impressions of the profile page are largely positive. First, there are a nice number of connections (79 at the time of this review), which is excellent because this can suggest to recruiters and viewers that you are social and personable. Using a custom URL for the profile was also a nice touch as it removes the clutter of random numbers that LinkedIn assigns to by default. The summary indicates experience with several programming languages”;
- including the name of these languages will assist recruiters searching with key words.
Profile Photo
The profile picture is quite personable, but:
- perhaps enlarge the profile photo to include the shirt collar. This photo is just a little too close-up, but great smile.
Title Box
Recruiting professionals most commonly use the current title box. For this reason, the title of “Student” may not be sufficient:
- adding a dummy title that includes the job title(s) targeted. One example is “Full-Time Student/ Java Developer.”
Effectiveness of the Summary
The summary is very brief and could use some work in capturing a professional personality that stands out from the crowd. A first person narrative is recommended on LinkedIn summaries; however,
- adding more details will be helpful:
- describing activities and career goals, values and passions
- listing the programming languages you have with keywords is important
Experience and Achievements
Naming specific platforms and frameworks, such as Jenkins, Gerrit, and JIRA is good, and could attract recruiters who are searching for specific skills. Following these tips will improve this section:
- making a stronger effort to highlight specific accomplishments and achievements to market these skills will impress the reader with your performance skills
- providing details: being specific about the benefits accomplished via your performance
- reviewing the text-book advice on how to be specific about the benefits of accomplishments is a good idea.
Volunteer Experience
- Including volunteer experience would be impressive if possible
Education and Courses
- Listing courses in numerical order, and only including the courses that are relevant to your career objectives will improve the readability
Skills
- Listing as many keyword skills as possible, and working continuously to increase your endorsements is important.
- Some research suggests that for computer software developers, the ‘Skills’ list should come right after the summary.
Connections
An impressive number of connections – which can be used for references.
- asking connections with credentials to write a brief LinkedIn reference for your page is a good idea
- joining and following a few more relevant associations and groups will increase the notifications and keep you up to date and well informed on the job market.
Grammatical and Expression
This writing flows well and is concise with no glaring grammatical errors — though:
- in the work experience description for Tasktop, “Managed and Configured” should be “Managed and configured” to be consistent.
Here are a couple of sentences to consider rephrasing:
- Through a multitude of projects at school and work, I have been exposed to several programming languages.
- Rewrite: My experience with a multitude of projects, both academic and professional, has included gaining expertise in several programming languages: list languages here.
Conclusion
You have a great beginning for an excellent profile page and with a few tweaks and some additions, you are well on your way.
To summarize for you, here is a list of suggested tasks:
- Improving the profile photo
- Changing the title
- Rewriting the summary with a focus on highlighting your personality and listing keywords for recruiters
- Being specific about the benefits of accomplishments. For example,
- “ Wrote new documentation for numerous procedures and processes”
- Rewrite: – created new documentation for numerous procedures and processes that resulted in increased efficiency and decreased errors.
- Including volunteer activities
- Listing courses numerically and delete repetition
- Increasing keywords for search engines
- Soliciting references
- Continuing to join relevant groups and follow associations
- Rephrasing some sentences in an effort to increase details and clarity.
I have enjoyed my read and I hope my suggestions are helpful. Please feel free to let me know if you have any questions or comments.
Thank you xxxxxx
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