To: Russel Gerbrandt
From: Dakota Tryhuba
Date: 05 March 2019
Subject: Peer Review of Writing with You-Attitude Assignment
First Impressions
Your memo appears to be written well – concise and keeps to the point with no grammar issues – and adhering to the assignment’s guidelines. You do a good job at emphasizing the positive and offer some well-meaning criticism by indicating what can be done to improve one’s writing style.
Memo Sections
The introduction is well written, being direct, concise, and professional in tone. The error in Evan’s email is immediately identified, and you effectively focus on solving the problem by offering some solutions right away.
The email tips section is well written with appropriate and helpful suggestions offered for the improvement of Evan’s writing style.
The conclusion is nicely written, indicating why the tips will be effective for Evan, and ending the message with a friendly and polite invitation to contact you by providing your contact information.
Writing Style
The tone is professional and helpful without sounding condescending/insulting.
Grammar
Your grammar had no errors. Very well done!
Conclusion
Overall, them email memo was well written. It emphasizes the positive can offers solutions of what can be done for improvement by suggesting specific goals. The memo also addresses alternative options that remain on how the reader can accomplish their goals.
Link to Russel Gerbrandt’s memo: https://blogs.ubc.ca/engl301-99c-2018wc/2019/03/04/assignment-31-you-attitude-memo-russel-gerbrandt/
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